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    Today, 07:04 PM
    Shaun replied to a thread Feedback on Script exerpt in Writing
    Hey, so I know you're an artist and you’re writing this largely as short hand for yourself but it’s hard to give feedback on it in this format. It’s...
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    Today, 05:14 PM
    Shaun replied to a thread Feedback on Script exerpt in Writing
    You should, of course, do what you feel comfortable with but posting a small snippet to an online writer's community is a good way to get honest,...
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    Today, 04:55 PM
    Thanks, Chris. Good entries all around! Let's see if we can get more participation next month. New theme is...Risk vs reward. Your character(s)...
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    01-20-2017, 02:20 PM
    Clearly this is one of our more entertaining writing threads yet.
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    01-19-2017, 06:05 PM
    I don't know if you'll make it but it's entertaining as hell to watch you try!
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    01-19-2017, 02:35 PM
    The bigger question is, can Mister Pants get enough comments to vote in a poll by the 23rd? We need a tie breaker (assuming he doesn't vote for...
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    01-19-2017, 02:34 PM
    I feel like in the past the poll was a separate thread, most likely for the reason you mentioned. I would vote to do it that way but I don't feel...
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    01-18-2017, 07:27 PM
    Hey Misterpants, commenting over in the break room is an easy place to up your post count. When I joined PJ I went in there and in a few days i had...
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    01-18-2017, 02:27 PM
    Thanks to everyone who provided feedback on my story. I was pretty rusty but having all the extra sets of eyes really helps me narrow my focus on...
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    01-18-2017, 02:25 PM
    Sorry for the delay. I planned on trying to implement the rating system Chris had mentioned (i.e. format, dialogue, pacing, etc) but haven't had the...
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    01-16-2017, 07:29 PM
    Hey Dredd, thanks for the feedback! Good call on the CEO intro dialogue. I got lazy there. As for the ending I see where you're coming from...
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    01-13-2017, 01:51 AM
    Beautiful work. I'd pay to read this.
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    01-11-2017, 04:38 PM
    Maybe we give it till tomorrow? I think a three day extension is reasonable. Boy the feedback on that proving ground article looks brutal! But...
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    01-10-2017, 02:22 PM
    Whoa I totally missed that! Good catch. Should we extend the deadline? Does anybody need more time? I know Zepster and Tudore seemed interested. ...
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    01-09-2017, 06:21 PM
    For Joseph Dredd, “Masks” I like this concept and it’s well written but I’m not sure how entertaining it would be to draw/read. I suppose it’s a...
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    01-06-2017, 03:26 PM
    For Misterpants (heh), "The Vigilante" I don't think you have enough story for five pages. Apart from a lot of talking heads and what seems to be...
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    01-04-2017, 07:38 PM
    Dude, this looks great as well! Blown away anyone even read the script. Ron & Pete, let me know if you had any challenges with the script. Any areas...
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    01-04-2017, 05:20 PM
    Shaun replied to a thread Info Dumping. Thoughts? in Writing
    I agree that distracting the reader is a good way to sneak in the necessary info, but be sure to ask yourself if it is actually necessary info at...
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    01-03-2017, 08:26 PM
    Shaun replied to a thread Pages for Pummel in Sequential Art
    Wow! Great work. Blown away to see these panels come to life. I think breaking up page 1 was definitely the right way to go. Much better hook without...
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    01-02-2017, 08:10 PM
    For Chris, "Unusual Suspects" I like what you’ve done with this one. Great action and a fun twist at the end. I love the title too, it plays on...
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    01-02-2017, 02:56 AM
    Shaun replied to a thread Script In Development in Writing
    Hey Jacob, this forum is for posting your writing or writing related questions. If you want to plug your work the bulletin board forum will get you...
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    01-01-2017, 12:18 PM
    Wow, thanks for the detailed and spot-on feedback, Chris! I'm going to tweak a few things before the deadline, just for prosperity. Also looking...
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    Hey. You probably don't remember me, but I posted a long-ass thing here a while ago, and you gave me neat advice. So thanks.

    I made a new post, a bit shorter one.

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    Hey Shaun,
    I followed your lead and started a writing blog on blogspot. How did you get a link that goes to your blog below you posts?
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    Hey Shaun,
    Just looked through a couple of your stories on your writing blog and I really enjoyed them. Phantom limb is both sad and sincere, although I think one hand joke is enough.
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    Thanks for the advice!
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    see the new one?
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    Thanks for overlooking my script Shaun.. I appreciate the feedback greatly!
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    Ah nice! Thanks a bunch. Definitely wish people were more open minded to stuff like this. Sorta hope that my character would go far and sorta open people's eyes.
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Genetically engineered to be the perfect assassin Shaun was kidnapped by his surrogate father and raised in the Finnish wilderness to be a killing machine. When finally ready to face his past Shaun activated a locator alerting his evil scientist creators to his whereabouts. In a flurry of blood and severed limbs Shaun won his freedom and, along the way, learned how to be a normal person.
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