..in a galaxy far...FAR AWAY!!!!!

[N8B!]

YOOOOO!...

what up folks?

anywho, these are a couple pages from a Starwars story that im dickin with..just for kicks inbetween my watchers stuff.....

Ive only done two pages..but I'll post the others whenever i get them done....

you MAY wanna view the large files...its easier to see the details.....

anywho hit me up with your thoughts....

one love,
N8B!
page one
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v81/nateb/SWpg1.jpg
page two
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v81/nateb/SWpg2.jpg

LARGE!
page one
http://www.deviantart.com/view/11850215/
page two
http://www.deviantart.com/view/11850250/

[guerilla mosh]

What ever this is for I want it. Great stuff. The only thing is the guy in the first panel on the first page seems a little strched out (diagonally).

[cabralsoth]

hey n8b, nice pencil work, no real crits on the first page, but the second page lacks clarity... i understand about 3 of the panels... other than that i am lost... they appear to be shots of machina, but i have no idea what, and how it ties into the story...

[Bruce Lee]

I feel like you could have done more to establish things better throughout, as there's so many unfamiliar character and objects on these two pages. Since things aren't well established, the pages lack clarity in several places. I'm not sure as to what I'm looking at in some panels. On page two, panels one, three, and five are prime examples where I have no idea what it is I'm looking at. :confused:

Loston
http://www.lostonwallace.com