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Conan73
05-01-2004, 10:39 PM
This is the revised version of my thunder script. Any crits are welcome.


Thunder
version 2

Page 1

Panel 1 ( top of page ) :

In the center of this panel a large circular building that is made up of pieces of solid white marble ( which has silver, light grey, and black swirls running through it’s surface). On the roof of this building an enormous circular opal crystal rests at the very center and shines as the bright sunlight hits it’s surface. Along the sides of the walkway are honeysuckle bushes, where humming birds can be seen flying around these bushes. On both sides of the building and the pathway are large green fields.

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Caption: Olympus, once a place of relative peace and harmony for thousands of years--

Panel two (middle of page):

Around the building long marble columns could be seen rising up to the roof as rose vines rise up their surface and bloom in various colors ( red, white, peach, and yellow). A large set of oval iron doors could be seen in the front of the building, which leads to a stair way the leads to a white marble walkway that leads away from it.

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Caption: and in a moment all of that changed.

Panel three ( bottom of page ):

Close up picture of the large oval shaped iron door is setting into the wall that is in front of the building that leads up into the building

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Caption: a change that will not only effect the life of one person but could effect the lives of everyone around the world.



Page 2

Panel One ( splash page)

The lone figure of a woman can be seen looking at her peers who are sitting at a half moon shaped table facing her. Their features are hidden by the shadows , as the light causes all of the focus to be on her. The light that is being shined on her becomes brighter which reveals some of her features. Her hair is tied back into a bun. She has a slim build and a long delicate face, which can be seen even though she wears a long flowing silk like half black and half white robes.

Caption (small): This lone figure is none other than Themis the goddess of justice who looks boldly out at the very people who will decide her fate.

Panel two ( bottom of page )

She can be seen standing in the very center of the chamber which is dark except for a light that shines down in the middle of the room and right over her. Her face is heavily shadowed and the only things that are visible on her person is her long half black and half white robes, as well as her light brown hair. ( she is wearing the traditional Greek Togas)

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Caption: This lone woman, though an act of compassion for another being, has committed an act that has been forbidden since the Great Accession took place thousands of years ago. Now she must stand before of her peers who will decide her fate.

Page 3

Panel three ( Splash page )

The woman is standing in the middle of a large circular room, which has long opal crystal pillars that can be seen twisting up towards the ceiling. Where the light is reflected off of the shiny white marble floor, there can be seen various pictures of the constellations.
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Title (towards bottom of page ): The Exile.
Space left below for credits such as:
Written by: Timothy Coney
Penciler:
Inker: Colorist:


Page 4

Panel one ( top of page )

A man who sits upon the throne wears a crown made out of white gold that has square pieces of ebony lining its center which arcs up until it forms a point at the middle of the crown. To the left of this man is a woman dressed in robes who sits upon a throne that is also made of ivory but has a back piece that has been formed into the shape of a peacock. (Concentration of this shot is on the man and not on the woman who is sitting beside him.)

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Panel Two ( middle of page )

The man has long light brown hair, thick light brown beard, and light brown eyes, as well as having a very muscular physique which shadows any of those that have gathered at the half moon shaped table in front of him. He wears a light grey inner robes and white outer robes that have silver leafing running along their edges. On his forearms he wears silver bracers that are made of white gold and holds a silver scepter that has an eagles head at its tip which he holds in his right hand.

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Caption: The man that sits upon the throne is the Greek god Zeus who must now preside over the council that will decide the fate of one of his children.

Panel three ( bottom of page)

Zeus has a very stern look and a loud commanding voice upon his face as he begins to talk to Themis.

Zeus: Themis, you stand in front of this council accused of violating one of our most sacred of edicts. What have you to say about these allegations?

Page 5

Panel one ( top of page)

Themis is looking over at her father boldly with her arms folded across her chest.

Themis : Yes, mighty Zeus, I have. The reason for my actions.....


Panel two ( middle of page)

A furious look can be see in Zeus’ face, as strange light begins to shine out of his eyes, while he yells angrily at Themis.

Zeus: Silence! Themis you have been accused of interfering in the affairs of mortals - that has been expressly forbidden since the time of my son Hercules! Any of which I might have forgiven you, except for this loathsome act!

Panel three ( bottom of page)

Standing up from her seat at the center of the half moon shaped table, which is located in front of Zeus’ throne, is a woman dressed in white robes. She has long curly black hair which is tied back with a piece of golden ribbon. She has a athletic build and a subtle beauty about her. She also wears a dark brown leather chest plate armor ( the Aegis that was made out of a goat skin), she wears bronze forearm gauntlets, and has a bronze Corinthian helmet resting in front of her on the table. She is seen leaning forward, while leaning against the table with her other hand and pointing accusingly at Themis. {Get picture of Aegis and Corinthian helmet}

Athena: Granting powers to mortals! Did you not learn about the mistakes that have been made in the past when mortals were granted powers by one of the gods?


Page 6

Panel 1 ( top of page )

A man sitting on the far left hand side of the table. He has a crooked smile on his face as he looked over at Themis. He wears a black chest armor, black bracers on both of his forearms, and a silver band across his forehead. He has a handsome face, black beard, and long black hair.

Ares: I say for what she has done death is too good for her! Throw her into Tartarus and let the Titans deal with her!






Panel 2 ( middle left hand side of page )

Standing up from the ivory throne, that is situated to the right of Zeus, is a woman who is dressed in a white robe that is gold lining its edges. An golden headdress, that is shaped into the form of a Peacock with its feathers stretcher out wide, rests upon her chestnut colored long curly hair. She has beautiful slim face and a very slim build, as well as having blue green eyes.

Hera: How could you say something like that Ares? After all, if it was not for Themis, you might still be stuck in that jar that those Titan twins put you into!


Panel 3 ( middle right hand side of page)

A woman who is sitting on the far right hand side of the table. She wears a dark green short dress and a dark brown leather tunic over it, while wearing a dark green string to tie her black hair back in a pony tail. On each of her forearms, she wears some dark brown leather bracers and on her right hand she wears a black glove. She has a natural beauty about her and an athletic build to her.

Artemis: (laughing at Ares) I remember that battle! Ares you were screaming for help for about two months before Themis heard you and helped to release you from your prison!

Page 7

Panel 1 ( top of page )

Glaring angrily at Artemis, Ares leans forward in this seat.

Ares: WE ARE SUPPOSE TO BE DECIDING THEMIS’ FATE AND NOT MAKING LIGHT OF SOMETHING THAT HAPPENED TO ME IN THE PAST!

Panel 2 ( middle of page)

Athena is still standing up and facing Themis.

Athena: WELL I SAY SINCE SHE CARES FOR THE MORTALS SO MUCH, WHY DON’T YOU TURN HER INTO ONE?

Panel 3 ( bottom left of page )

A mischievous look can be seen on Ares face, as he glances over at Themis from where he is sitting at the table.

Ares: NO ATHENA THAT’S NOT ENOUGH! STRIP HER OF ALL OF HER POWERS AND GIVE THEM TO THOSE AMONG US THAT ARE WORTHY OF THEM AND THEN LET HER LIVE AMONG THE MORTALS THAT SHE CARES SO MUCH FOR!

Panel 4 ( bottom right of page )

With a look of outrage on her face, Artemis looks over at Ares and points at him accusingly.

Artemis: YOU JUST WANT HER TO BE DEFENSELESS SO THAT YOU CAN TORMENT HER! OR MAYBE YOU JUST WANT TO GAIN MORE POWER FOR YOURSELF!

Page8


Panel 1 ( top of page )

Zeus: SILENCE! I HAVE MADE MY DECISION ON WHAT WILL BECOME OF YOU THEMIS!

Panel 2 ( middle of the page )

Zeus: YOU WILL BE STRIPPED OF YOUR IMMORTALITY AS WELL AS ALL OF YOUR POWERS--

Panel 3 ( bottom of page )

Hera leans over and lays her arm on top of Zeus’ arm and places her hand, and whispers into Zeus’ ear.

Hera: ZEUS, I THINK YOU HAVE BEEN TO HARD ON THEMIS, MAYBE YOU COULD GIVE HER A CHANCE TO MAKE AMENDS FOR WHAT SHE HAS DONE.

Page 9

Panel 1 ( top of the page)

A sympathetic look appears on Zeus’ face, as his once glowing eyes return to normal, whispering to Hera.

Zeus: HERA, HOW CAN I ALLOW HER TO REMAIN AMONG US? THAT MORTAL DISHONORS US BY USING THE GIFTS THAT SHE HAS GIVEN HIM AND HAS COMMIT EVIL ACTS AGAINST HELPLESS INNOCENTS DOWN ON EARTH!

Page 10

Panel 1 ( top of the page )

Hera: WHAT IF SHE WERE TO FIND A MORTAL WHO WOULD AGREE TO ACT AS HER CHAMPION ON EARTH, SO THAT HE MIGHT OPPOSE THE ONE WHO CAUSED US SUCH A DISHONOR?


Panel 2 ( middle of the page )
Rubbing his chin and gently taking Hera’s hand into his own, Zeus looks over at Themis with a stern look on his face

Zeus: VERY WELL, I HAVE MADE MY DECISION. THEMIS YOU WILL BE STRIPPED OF YOUR IMMORTALITY--


Panel 3 ( bottom of the page )

Gently Zeus pulls his arm away from Hera, as he begins to raise his scepter up into the air.

Zeus: HOWEVER YOU WILL KEEP ONLY ENOUGH POWER TO DEFEND YOURSELF. SHOULD YOU FIND A MORTAL WHO IS WORTH ENOUGH TO ACT AS YOUR CHAMPION ON EARTH--

Page 9

Panel 1 ( top of page )

Zeus points his Scepter at Themis, as a strange silvery white glow starts to emanate from it.

Zeus: AND SHOULD THEY DEFEAT THE MORTAL WHO DISHONORS US, THEN I SHALL ALLOW YOU TO RETURN TO OLYMPUS. SO THEMIS, PREPARE YOURSELF, YOUR PUNISHMENT BEGINS NOW!

Panel 2 ( middle of the page)

Themis hold her head up with a look of determination on her face, as she bravely steps towards Zeus.

Themis: VERY WELL MIGHTY ZEUS, I AM READY.

Panel 3 ( bottom of the page )

Out of the tip of Zeus’ wand a silvery white light shone down and bathed Themis in its light, which causes her body to give off a white light glow. Her muscles are contracted and balls up her fists are clenched to help keep herself from screaming.

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Page 10

Panel 1 ( top of page )

While the Themis body continues to give off the white glow and rises up off of her body like steam. The pain that is felt by Themis can be seen in her face, but in her eyes Zeus can see her fierce determination, as her pride will not allow her to cry out in pain.

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Panel 2 ( middle of the page )

The light now no longer shines from Zeus’s scepter, as the pain that Themis feels finally forces her down on one knee.
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Panel 3

The other gods watch Themis in awe, as she struggles to stand herself back up onto her feet and the white glow is still lifting up off of her body.


Panel 4 ( bottom left of page )

The white glow now swirls around above her head like the a whirlwind, as a bright shining white light can be seen coming form its center. This is happening while she is seen standing on her feet facing the light above her head.

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Panel 5 ( bottom right of page )

Then a bright flash can be seen coming from the center of the whirlwind, and a rough outline of a round crystal can be seen at its center.

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Page 11

Panel 1 ( top left of page )

The clear crystal can be seen flying through the air as it makes its way towards Zeus.

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Panel 2 ( top right of page )

The crystal floats down into Zeus’ open hand, as Ares can be seen standing beside him with a smirk upon his face.

Ares: FATHER WHY DON’T YOU LET ME HOLD ONTO THAT FOR YOU...

Panel 3 ( middle of page )

Zeus , who has a very annoyed look on his face, makes a dismissive wave with his hand towards Ares.

Zeus: RETURN TO YOUR SEAT ARES!

Page 12

Panel 1 ( top of page )

Zeus now faces Themis

Zeus: IT IS DONE, NOW LEAVE THIS PLACE THEMIS UNTIL YOU FIND YOUR QUEST IS DONE.

Panel 2 ( middle of page )

Themis turns to leave the room when Ares follows her out of the room. Her hair is messed up and shakily making her way out of the room.
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Panel 3 ( bottom of page)

Ares catches up to her and turns to face her with a mischievous smirk on his face.

Ares: THEMIS, WHERE ARE YOU GOING TO FIND THIS CHAMPION? ON EARTH? HAVE YOU NOT SEEN WHAT IT IS LIKE DOWN THERE LATELY?


Page 13


Panel 1 ( top of page )

Watching Ares out of the corner of her eye, as a smile starts to form out of a corner of Themis’ face.

Themis: DO NOT WORRY, ARES , I WILL FIND THE CHAMPION THAT I SEEK!


Panel 2 ( middle of page)

Themis: BY THE WAY ARES DO NOT THINK TO INTERFERE WITH MY QUEST FOR IF YOU DO, UPON MY RETURN, YOU WILL FACE A PUNISHMENT FAR MORE SEVERE THAN WHAT HAS BEEN GIVEN TO ME!

Panel 3 ( bottom of the page)

Ares was standing in the door way and watched, as Themis disappeared into a flash of bright white light!

Caption: Thus Themis begins journey for her champion and only chance for redemption.
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