psychoheat
03-19-2004, 03:03 PM
This is what i have so far of the #1 issue of my story Test Subject 4 (The Apocalipsys Project)
here are the characters i have on the net so you know how is on the story, Jen (the girl) is the only one not individualy posted.
Samuel (Light Cage)
http://www.deviantart.com/view/4545249/
http://www.deviantart.com/view/5871881/ (this is my Deviant ID)
Max
http://www.deviantart.com/view/4849172/
Liquid
http://www.deviantart.com/view/4965720/
All
http://www.deviantart.com/view/5238655/
please tell me what you think (side note i write better in spanish, so there might be some gramatical mistakes, so please let me know so i can fix them)
advanced Thanks
__________________________________________________ __
TEST SUBJECT 4
(The Apocalipsis Project) ©
PROLOGE
This is what history tells
About 20 years ago, people lived in relative peace, walking in the streets trying to earn some money in order to eat, and have a place to live, often they concentrated in other things just to forget the problems that surounded their lives, they knew of violence and fear all around the world, but little they knew of what was happening below their feet, what was in store for them.
But their ignorance was violently removed one day, a very normal day, in something that they called weekend, this special day people went out of their so called houses to enjoy the sun and the air, and to share some time with their families on something that they called parks and they had fun, like this little kid, a very normal 8 year old boy who plays with his sister in a woodden box full of sand, but something cought his attention, a glow, like a second sun, he ran to his parents and ask them what was that beautiful glow, but before they could answer a blow of wind hit them with the strength of death, followed by fire, and parts of destroied buildings and trees killing them before they could react. With out notice the shock wave destroyed and killed everything that stood over the ground, leaving destruction and death all around.
Only a few thousand humans lived, trying to survive the best way they could.
CHAPTER ONE
Through the ruins of a destroyed city a boy runs with a smile in his face, his body covered with a sintetic fabric and his forearms with some kind of higly technologicaly advanced gloves, explosions indicated that there was an enemy behind him, soon form behind a group of rocks a few soldiers came out with heavy armor around their bodies, and weapons in their hands, after an order from they’re commander they fired their weapons against the boy, who turned around with a jump to face the attack , he putted his hands right in front of his body, a blue light came out of them and a bubble of the same color appear around him all the laser beams bounced off the blue force field.
-Sir, the kid is repeling the attack –
-Call the artillery –
-Sir yes sir –
Almost immediately three hi tech tanks came to scene destroying some ruined walls to open a path.
-Waiting for orders – a mechanical voice came out of the vehicle.
-Attack – said the commander.
At that moment one of the tanks shoot a powerfull laser beam to the kid who was thrown to a wall, fortunately for him the force field protected him from any damage, but it desapear the moment the kid touched the ground, the cannon of the tank glowed to show a second beam but before the attack took place a blue thunder came from the sky destroying the vehicle.
-What happend? – asked the commander surprised.
-Sir look above - said one of the soldiers who was pointing up. When the rest of the soldiers looked That way, they saw a boy flying with electricity coming ot from his hands.
-Fire – laser beams started to go to the boy, who dodge them with out a problem, after that he used his power to attack the soldiers who fell defeated.
-Well that wasn’t that hard – but his happyness was stoped by a laser attack that threw him to the ground, a new laser was shoot from the tank, but a green sphere covered the boy.
-You have to pay more attention Max - the voice was that of a girl who was standing over some rocks and energy came out of her hands.
-I guess you’re right, where is Liquid we have two more tanks to destroy –.
-Look – Max looked to the tanks, one of them was asuming a blue-gray color, after this a boy dressed with blue red and yellow sintetic clothes jumped on top of the vehicle – one more to go -. The cannon of the last tank turned to Liquid, and from one of the access doors one soldier came out with a gun in his hands.
-surrender and the boy won’t die -, after hearing this Liquid with a smile in his face pointed up, when the soldier looked to the way he was indicating he saw the boy with the gloves jumping with some gigantic blue energy fists coming out of his hands, with which he hitted the tank destroing it like it was made out of paper.
here are the characters i have on the net so you know how is on the story, Jen (the girl) is the only one not individualy posted.
Samuel (Light Cage)
http://www.deviantart.com/view/4545249/
http://www.deviantart.com/view/5871881/ (this is my Deviant ID)
Max
http://www.deviantart.com/view/4849172/
Liquid
http://www.deviantart.com/view/4965720/
All
http://www.deviantart.com/view/5238655/
please tell me what you think (side note i write better in spanish, so there might be some gramatical mistakes, so please let me know so i can fix them)
advanced Thanks
__________________________________________________ __
TEST SUBJECT 4
(The Apocalipsis Project) ©
PROLOGE
This is what history tells
About 20 years ago, people lived in relative peace, walking in the streets trying to earn some money in order to eat, and have a place to live, often they concentrated in other things just to forget the problems that surounded their lives, they knew of violence and fear all around the world, but little they knew of what was happening below their feet, what was in store for them.
But their ignorance was violently removed one day, a very normal day, in something that they called weekend, this special day people went out of their so called houses to enjoy the sun and the air, and to share some time with their families on something that they called parks and they had fun, like this little kid, a very normal 8 year old boy who plays with his sister in a woodden box full of sand, but something cought his attention, a glow, like a second sun, he ran to his parents and ask them what was that beautiful glow, but before they could answer a blow of wind hit them with the strength of death, followed by fire, and parts of destroied buildings and trees killing them before they could react. With out notice the shock wave destroyed and killed everything that stood over the ground, leaving destruction and death all around.
Only a few thousand humans lived, trying to survive the best way they could.
CHAPTER ONE
Through the ruins of a destroyed city a boy runs with a smile in his face, his body covered with a sintetic fabric and his forearms with some kind of higly technologicaly advanced gloves, explosions indicated that there was an enemy behind him, soon form behind a group of rocks a few soldiers came out with heavy armor around their bodies, and weapons in their hands, after an order from they’re commander they fired their weapons against the boy, who turned around with a jump to face the attack , he putted his hands right in front of his body, a blue light came out of them and a bubble of the same color appear around him all the laser beams bounced off the blue force field.
-Sir, the kid is repeling the attack –
-Call the artillery –
-Sir yes sir –
Almost immediately three hi tech tanks came to scene destroying some ruined walls to open a path.
-Waiting for orders – a mechanical voice came out of the vehicle.
-Attack – said the commander.
At that moment one of the tanks shoot a powerfull laser beam to the kid who was thrown to a wall, fortunately for him the force field protected him from any damage, but it desapear the moment the kid touched the ground, the cannon of the tank glowed to show a second beam but before the attack took place a blue thunder came from the sky destroying the vehicle.
-What happend? – asked the commander surprised.
-Sir look above - said one of the soldiers who was pointing up. When the rest of the soldiers looked That way, they saw a boy flying with electricity coming ot from his hands.
-Fire – laser beams started to go to the boy, who dodge them with out a problem, after that he used his power to attack the soldiers who fell defeated.
-Well that wasn’t that hard – but his happyness was stoped by a laser attack that threw him to the ground, a new laser was shoot from the tank, but a green sphere covered the boy.
-You have to pay more attention Max - the voice was that of a girl who was standing over some rocks and energy came out of her hands.
-I guess you’re right, where is Liquid we have two more tanks to destroy –.
-Look – Max looked to the tanks, one of them was asuming a blue-gray color, after this a boy dressed with blue red and yellow sintetic clothes jumped on top of the vehicle – one more to go -. The cannon of the last tank turned to Liquid, and from one of the access doors one soldier came out with a gun in his hands.
-surrender and the boy won’t die -, after hearing this Liquid with a smile in his face pointed up, when the soldier looked to the way he was indicating he saw the boy with the gloves jumping with some gigantic blue energy fists coming out of his hands, with which he hitted the tank destroing it like it was made out of paper.