foxmerquise8
11-18-2003, 06:09 PM
This story is about a city which always rains, here are the first 5 pages. Excuse any typos. CnC welcome
Page 1
Panel 1 - Full Page
View of a dinner, there is a dinner sign on top of it that says dinner. It’s rainy pretty hard and the streets around the dinner are pretty dirty. There are some people walking past the diner in the attire you usually put on for rain.
Panel 2 - A somewhat square box Overlaying on panel 1
Feet are seen walking in the street. They are making a splash. It’s still rainy.
Text - The rain, the rain never stops. Ever since I came here, the City by the River or that’s what I call it. There wasn't a river when I came here, but now there is and the citizens have to live with it, because of me. It’s been five years since it started, the rain. That’s when I came here. I had a name, but the people here just call me the Rain Man.
Page 2
Panel 1 - One third of the page cut vertically. The panel stagers over the others.
A man (RAIN MAN) with a brown trench coat opens the dinner door, which is mostly glass. RAIN MAN has a rugged look to him and his hair is a bit messy, but not too long.
Panel 2 - What’s left of the page cut horizontally?
RAIN MAN is inside the dinner, which is someone old and has that classic look to it, but it resembles the streets outside, as in that it’s very gritty. You can see the both see all along the walls; the walls have windows by them.
Panel 3 - What’s left of the page
RAIN MAN is about to sit down in a booth seat that has the usually salt and pepper shaker on the table along with napkins. The booth is against a window, which shows the hard, raining outside.
Text - 5 years ago, I was cursed. The curse was that wherever I go, it rained. I moved to this town, which once had a get drought, but that problem has been solved, with new problems arising. With me I brought a never ending rain, it might as well be a rain of bullets because this city is being slowly tore apart. The suicide rate and drug traffic have gone up with the loss of the collective sanity of this city. Being born in this city is an extra burden, since you don't know or understand the concept of sunlight.
Page 3
Panel 1
RAIN MAN is sitting at the same booth in the last page look over a menu.
Panel 2
RAIN MAN has his hand raised, as to if he is calling for someone. The menu is flat on the table
Panel 3
RAIN MAN has his hands down now with a waiter by him. The waiter (JENNY) is female, and young.
Panel 4
Same picture as before
JENNY - Hi, the usual right?
RAIN MAN - You know it. How are you doing today?
JENNY - The same as yesterday, wishing it would stop raining.
Panel 5
Same picture as before, but JENNY has a pad out writing down the order.
RAIM MAN - As everybody else, how is Danny doing
JENNY - Great, he is at daycare now. My shift is almost over, do you want to take me to the daycare.
Panel 6
Same picture, but Jenny's head is up
RAIN MAN - Sure, I have no cases today, and I always want to see Danny
JENNY - Good, we can go soon as you finish your meal
Page 4
Panel 1
RAIN MAN is eating at the same both. There is breakfast food on his plate.
Panel 2
RAIN MAN is getting up from the table
Panel 3
RAIN MAN is putting money on the table, next to the check.
Panel 4
RAIN MAN is holding the dinner door for JENNY, who has a coat on now.
JENNY - Thanks a lot for tip.
RAIN MAN - No problem.
JENNY - I also like to thank you for the ride, I really need a car, and it’s a long walk to the daycare
RAIN MAN - Especially in the Rain.
Page 5
Panel 1
RAIN MAN is behind the steering wheel of a car, driving. JENNY is in the passenger seat, holding a bag. It’s still rainy really hard. The windshield wipers are active on the car. The car is one of those old Cadillac / town car things.
RAIN MAN - You know you didn't have to name the kid after me
JENNY - But Danny is such a pretty name, and it’s the least I can do for saving my life.
RAIN MAN - No need to thank me, its just my job.
Panel 2
RAIN MAN and Jenny are getting out of the car, which is parked next to the sidewalk. The car is in front of a storefront type building (like in an urban setting). There is an Awning over the store, which says Sunny Daycare.
Page 1
Panel 1 - Full Page
View of a dinner, there is a dinner sign on top of it that says dinner. It’s rainy pretty hard and the streets around the dinner are pretty dirty. There are some people walking past the diner in the attire you usually put on for rain.
Panel 2 - A somewhat square box Overlaying on panel 1
Feet are seen walking in the street. They are making a splash. It’s still rainy.
Text - The rain, the rain never stops. Ever since I came here, the City by the River or that’s what I call it. There wasn't a river when I came here, but now there is and the citizens have to live with it, because of me. It’s been five years since it started, the rain. That’s when I came here. I had a name, but the people here just call me the Rain Man.
Page 2
Panel 1 - One third of the page cut vertically. The panel stagers over the others.
A man (RAIN MAN) with a brown trench coat opens the dinner door, which is mostly glass. RAIN MAN has a rugged look to him and his hair is a bit messy, but not too long.
Panel 2 - What’s left of the page cut horizontally?
RAIN MAN is inside the dinner, which is someone old and has that classic look to it, but it resembles the streets outside, as in that it’s very gritty. You can see the both see all along the walls; the walls have windows by them.
Panel 3 - What’s left of the page
RAIN MAN is about to sit down in a booth seat that has the usually salt and pepper shaker on the table along with napkins. The booth is against a window, which shows the hard, raining outside.
Text - 5 years ago, I was cursed. The curse was that wherever I go, it rained. I moved to this town, which once had a get drought, but that problem has been solved, with new problems arising. With me I brought a never ending rain, it might as well be a rain of bullets because this city is being slowly tore apart. The suicide rate and drug traffic have gone up with the loss of the collective sanity of this city. Being born in this city is an extra burden, since you don't know or understand the concept of sunlight.
Page 3
Panel 1
RAIN MAN is sitting at the same booth in the last page look over a menu.
Panel 2
RAIN MAN has his hand raised, as to if he is calling for someone. The menu is flat on the table
Panel 3
RAIN MAN has his hands down now with a waiter by him. The waiter (JENNY) is female, and young.
Panel 4
Same picture as before
JENNY - Hi, the usual right?
RAIN MAN - You know it. How are you doing today?
JENNY - The same as yesterday, wishing it would stop raining.
Panel 5
Same picture as before, but JENNY has a pad out writing down the order.
RAIM MAN - As everybody else, how is Danny doing
JENNY - Great, he is at daycare now. My shift is almost over, do you want to take me to the daycare.
Panel 6
Same picture, but Jenny's head is up
RAIN MAN - Sure, I have no cases today, and I always want to see Danny
JENNY - Good, we can go soon as you finish your meal
Page 4
Panel 1
RAIN MAN is eating at the same both. There is breakfast food on his plate.
Panel 2
RAIN MAN is getting up from the table
Panel 3
RAIN MAN is putting money on the table, next to the check.
Panel 4
RAIN MAN is holding the dinner door for JENNY, who has a coat on now.
JENNY - Thanks a lot for tip.
RAIN MAN - No problem.
JENNY - I also like to thank you for the ride, I really need a car, and it’s a long walk to the daycare
RAIN MAN - Especially in the Rain.
Page 5
Panel 1
RAIN MAN is behind the steering wheel of a car, driving. JENNY is in the passenger seat, holding a bag. It’s still rainy really hard. The windshield wipers are active on the car. The car is one of those old Cadillac / town car things.
RAIN MAN - You know you didn't have to name the kid after me
JENNY - But Danny is such a pretty name, and it’s the least I can do for saving my life.
RAIN MAN - No need to thank me, its just my job.
Panel 2
RAIN MAN and Jenny are getting out of the car, which is parked next to the sidewalk. The car is in front of a storefront type building (like in an urban setting). There is an Awning over the store, which says Sunny Daycare.