monster!

[NickRocks]

something i did for halloween. i was trying to tell a story without actually telling it.
THE MONSTER
CHAPTER 1
SOON THE MONSTER WILL
COME; HE IS BIG BAD KILLER
AND BLOOD RUN WILL DOWN
CLAWS HIS;
BEFORE CHILDREN HE DEVOURS
HEARTS ATHOUSAND,
NO BUT ONE DARE
HIM CONFRONT BEFORE
THE WIELDING-SWORD OF
THE SUPERNINJA COMETH
AND SMITETH;
NONE CAN POWER
WITHSTAND,
THE ONE THAT HE DOTH
CALL UNDER FOOT
NINJA SUPER WILL
BE ANOTHER VICTORIOUS
AND MONSTER KILLER NOT
WILL BE DEAD

[banshee]

hmmmmm....

thats all I hv to say lol

[legend of 8]

It's a bit confusing... maybe because you mixed up the words? The pronouns aren't in the right places....

yeah, you totally lost me on this one. It doesn't really have rhythm to it either... although if you find a way to change it around a little, it'd be a good piece. ^_^