Old art jam sequentials

[jeremy dale]

http://thincage.tripod.com/conanrevised.jpg

http://thincage.tripod.com/turtles3web.jpg

Just sharing-- feel free to comment and all that. These are for the Conan and TMNT art jams, respectively.

Jeremy

[Spidey]

Originally posted by thincage

Just sharing-- feel free to comment and all that. These are for the Conan and TMNT art jams, respectively.

Jeremy
Theres no need to point out the already super clear.

I dont wanna scan the Conan one too closely cuz I want to view the comic for the first time in its entirety.

The tmnt page is cool however. Everything that the script called for was presented. It has good detail, compostion, etc... all that good stuff. My favorite panel is 4, where he's flicking the cigar. Thats good comic.

Sorry I didnt respond with anything helpful, Im just an artist admiring anothers.

[Virginie!]

so bold use of pencils confidence and year of practise my own are so light that I hardly can scan them well yet when i press harder it looses that something

[Virginie!]

what I meant is that if I drew something like this and used hard pencils it will look sooo amaterurish the only way I can draw something like this is with light multiple strokes carefully and for so minddistrubingly long time

[jeremy dale]

Heh-- I think I know what you're saying, Virginie. Thanks.
Spidey, great to hear! I've been grilling myself on anatomy lately, and hopefully I'll get it right before long.

Thanks for the comments, guys!

Jeremy

[Caimano]

I like both of them especially the Conan one I can see an improvement there. Good work

[EddieChingLives]

Conan-Everything looks nice. But there are two unclear shots. Panel four it took me a bit to realize the creature smacked him, and the last panel, I'm just not sure where he's looking at. Perhaps in the second to last panel, if conan was in the foreground in an over the shoulder shot, and what he was looking at was in the background, and then you cut to a close up of what he was looking at and it would be less confusing.

Turtles-The transition from panel 1 to 2 is confusing. I would have liked to see splinter and the dude really tiny in the first panel, then zoom into them into your panel 2.

Thats my only nitpicks for now. Your art is very crisp, and just on the verge of hitting pro. A little more polishing and experience and you'll definately be on your way.

Great job!

[jeremy dale]

Thanks, all-- yeah, those panels ARE confusing. I'll get it right next time, I promise. Thanks for the crits and comments thus far-- it's appreciated!

Jeremy

[TheFightingFoetus]

Well since they're old, I don't really feel a need to crit them. You've come a ways since this stuff, although I really enjoy both of these pages still.

Anatomy isn't everything, you know. ;)