View Full Version : Another Seq. Page
09-01-2003, 10:35 PM
Here you go. A story of a paramedic and his heroic effeorts as told by an overweight Middle Age man. Writer Sean McGurr.
Only crit would be the panel where the cars are flipped over....I think it rhough me off there.
09-01-2003, 11:13 PM
Looks like pro-quality to me.
Kinda hard to tell what's going on without the dialogue. So it's kinda hard to critique it.
Shot-wise, I think a nice two shot that shows the dudes in relation to the turned over car might help smooth things out a bit.
But great work overall.
09-02-2003, 12:00 AM
Looking good! Now hopefully you'll have a good inker on it so it doesn't get ruined..lol.
I like your style a lot. It's a good mix of manga with your own style. Keep up the good work.
09-02-2003, 08:24 PM
Jar and Ed - Thanks Guys. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Brian - are you saying my inks suck? LOL Well maybe I am no Dash Martin. Glad you liked it.
09-05-2003, 09:10 AM
Hi Rich, nice stuff. I know the writer, Sean. Not only do we work at the same place, but we're in the same writer/artist collaborative group that meets every other week at my place. Nice guy and a talented writer, I'm glad you hooked up with him on this project. best of luck and I look forward to seeing more pages.
09-05-2003, 09:43 AM
i think the straight on shot of the two is a bit stale, and i think you need another shot to show that two people are (i'm assuming) in the ambulance and not any of the other cars.
and i agree with eddieching's point.
you need to show more information about the environment and everyhting relation to each other.
but over all i think you've got a clean clear style. groovy baby.
09-05-2003, 06:56 PM
Thanks Guys. I'm glad everyone Likes it.
Loki - Yeah Sean is mad cool. This has been a real bunch of fun. I have Page 3 almost done but have to nitpick at it.
Powered by vBulletin® Version 4.2.1 Copyright © 2013 vBulletin Solutions, Inc. All rights reserved.