DarkSaviors #1 (WIP)

[Darkchild]

Here are the first 4 pages to my creator owned comic. They're still in the process of being finished. I gotta add some more detail to the buildings and flesh out the characters a little more. I already know that I'm going to be criticized for having a 3 panel per page average going on but it's intentional and is like that for the first 6 pages of the title. I'll post the rest when they're near completion.

http://www.artofficialstudios.com/ds01pg01.html

click on the page 2 link above and below the image to advance.

[jar]

Flows well, and I get a sence of what is going on. One thing, don't be affraid to add deatail. I know i know...those are buildings and they have INSANE ammounts of details, but spend the time on them, and BOOMSTICK!

[protagon]

You need to draw architecture and cities until you can draw them convincingly. Also I'm not sure you've mastered perspective yet I would spend a lot of time on that. Besides adding more detail the perspective isn't there, especially on the first panel.

[BrianDittfeld]

I agree with the other guys. Your work isn't horrible or anything by any means. You just still need to work on drawing architecture and proportion. Just by looking on Page 1, you can see right away on the angled birds-eye view panel that her arm is misproportioned from the rest of her body.

Work on these issues more and I'm sure we'll be seeing some kick-ass stuff begin to come from you in the future once you overcome these issues.

[Darkchild]

Yeah I'm going to detail the buildings a lot more. This is just a work in progress and I thought that I would see if I was headed in the right direction with my pages. PJ members always seem to give good advice. As for my perspective problem, Panel 1 page 2 looks right to me, if that is indeed the page you were referring to Protagon. It's two point perspective and I even have the two little dots and guidelines there to help me out. I guess I still screwed up somewhere. But the birds eye view probably could use a little more work. Thanks for the comments. I hope you see some improvement when I post the finished pages.

[Logan Fray]

The buildings are a little square and the hairs to flat.

[protagon]

I was talking about page one panel 1. It's weird how there's only one vanishing point on the buildings. You should make it two point perspective and get some reference.