Wonder Woman script for critique

[zanSeattle]

Hello all!

First time visitor, first time poster. I've been developing scripts for comics for the past few years and am just starting to really pursue paying projects.

I recently worked up some Wonder Woman scripts as examples of working with existing characters, and I would really appreciate some feedback.

This script, "The Test", is a downloadable PDF:
http://www.rabunda.com/preview/TheTest.pdf

Let me know what you think!

[banshee]

WELCOME to thewriters desk and PJ!!!!! :D

i will take a gander at ur script later today, got a hectic afternoon ahead :D tonight prob!

later days

[zanSeattle]

Thanks! I really appreciate the time.

Right now I'm making the rounds looking for projects to offer some constructive criticism to... don't want to come of as a "critique leech", after all.

[banshee]

it's no worries :D

C&c away or post up and await c&cs It's all part of the fun here!!!
or join in our story round too!
http://www.penciljack.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=36548

It's good to have new folks on board!

later days
B

[zanSeattle]

I started to read the story round, but when I read fantasy/sci-fi work that hits hard and fast with dozens of character and place names, my eyes glaze over really quick. I'm definitely a slice-of-lifer, though I appreciate good fantasy that's rooted firmly in familiar situations and emotions.

But perseverence furthers: I copied the text of the first three parts, and the opening description, to a separate document and will digest it and tackle the fourth part.

Into the breach!

[banshee]

I managed to get some time to take a peek at your initial script.

Very nice!! I really like it! it has some pyschological feel to it.

more, more, show us more! :D

looking fwd to seeing your #4 in the story round!!!! if you have a suggestion for another story round using "real-life" style, then sure, go ahead and suggest it to Vendetta. It will be fun to have more "exercises" here.

later days

lia etc