3 page batmn sequential

[Conman]

this is a sequntial I'm working on. Got the script from some sample site. This is the first three panels, 2/5ths of the entire page. Its a crappy scan and got cut off a bit but oh well
This is the script: http://j-street.org/scripts/ns.htm



http://images.deviantart.com/i/b/8/b/3_panel_batman.jpg

[Cuddly]

Hi Conman,

this is some nice work. The overhead lighting lends a really sombre mood to the piece and you've spotted blacks nicely throughout these three panels. Alfred looks very much on-model. I think the artwork would benefit greatly from gutters between the panels. If this page were inked, the black areas could merge from panel to panel and confuse this piece.

Also, Panel 3 right now doesn't follow the script. The script called for the Batmobile to be in the foreground and Alfred in the background.

Looking forward to seeing this page completed and hopefully the remaining pages too.

[Conman]

shit


I completely didn't notice the forground one....... I was thinking that would be easier to do as well. Thanks for the help