pg1 of bloodbath

[Studio Ronin]

;mrt;

[Grendel]

This is not finished, but I wont post the final till I get my damned 11x17 scanner so here is page 1 so far, I need to tighten some things up with the daughter/mother and make the children more visible in the 3rd panel.

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/pg1simeon.gif

[NickRocks]

very nice! i like the expression on the dads face

[behindthelass]

i agree. great expression great sequence. its almost shot like a movie. i love how it flows.
keep it up!
i want to pet the evil furry monsters tho. they look so cute a soft.
i think the only thing that might make the flow better is if yo put teh mother daughter picture before the daughter picture. of course i dont knwo the story, but its makes it more like you are sliding towards the bear/daughter. or put the mother in the daughter panel as wll because you should be able to see her right?

[psychoheat]

that is amazingly cool, you can really feel their fear:eek:

[Grendel]

thanks- thast true about the girl but the way the script is its better fer her to be alone first then the mom slide in

[Awesome B. Rockinsocks]

wow, very impressive, my only crit is with the first panel. I'm just confused as to what the wolves (were-wolves?) are looking at. I'm guessing a window since there are people inside with a window behind them on the third panel. Maybe some more defination with the lines in the window.

[Grendel]

I agree I fixed the window scene

[ishmiel]

good stuff as ussual grendal