Reyven Hunt 4-Page Preview

[Blackthorne]

Well, here is part of what I submited to Image 3 weeks ago. Now all the guys who have been supporting Reyven Hunt and myself can actualy get a read.
Thanks for the support, everyone!!
Enjoy:D
-Ray

http://images.deviantart.com/i/e/3/4/Reyven_Hunt_Lettered_page_One.jpg

http://images.deviantart.com/i/a/8/9/Reyven_Hunt_Lettered_page_Two.jpg

[Blackthorne]

http://images.deviantart.com/i/e/b/8/Reyven_Hunt_Lettered_pg_Three.jpg

http://images.deviantart.com/i/0/4/e/Reyven_Hunt_Lettered_pg_Four.jpg

[jeremy dale]

WoooOOOoooOOo! Thanks for the preview, Ray!

Wow, this looks tight-- in a couple of places it's hard to make out the lettering, but on the printed page it'll be bigger, and thus, easier to read.

As for a crit, the storytelling is very well done, as far as I see. The inking on page three is a little muddy in a few spots, but overall a good piece! My only concern is that all the negative space and blacks could possibly make it hard to make out what's going on in each panel-- but I only see that maybe once in these four pages.

Great job, keep it up!

Jeremy

[atom_basher]

well I speak for the people when i say that you deseerve the support

[Blackthorne]

Thanks guys..

Jeremy, the extra black on the sides were placed there by the letterer. It will be cut down whenever it gets printed for sure:)

-Ray

[Nerdface]

Ray,

This is absolutely beautiful!
If Image decides to publish this, I'm gonna bug the Dutch translator guys to print it here!

[eugene]

kudos hommie,this looks amazing good luck

-e

[Cuddly]

'sup Blackthorne!

I remember seeing that last page before when you posted it here and I remember thinking your art rocks.

Still think that. :)

I really like the artwork and your storytelling's pretty strong. My only real gripes are with the second page. Some of the shots aren't too clear and I had to look a while before I could figure out what was going on. Pulling back a bit to show more of the surroundings would have helped some. Pg2Pn1 is the weakest panel out of all 4 pages as I have no idea what's going on there.

The rest of this looks super sweet! Best of luck with Image!

[tWISTEd sPINe]

Looking good!

I like the panel layouts.

Page 4 doesn't look like the inks were finished, a lot of it looks like pencils.

[MightyMatt]

that's pretty nice ray...good luck on the book.

matt

[ComicsInk]

HEY SWEET!!! love ur style and it ses Culver City, its where me is at! love it!