Sequential for collaboration

[HUH?]

I was pretty happy with the way this came out. I'm doing it for a collaboration. It's about a Nam POW recounting his tail to this guy. Please give me some C&C!http://www.renderosity.com/photos/GAL_200308/GalleryImage466142.jpg

[PencilVillian]

Actually I like the sequence of panels (get it :D .....*AHEM*). The dude gets the guy a drink, he drinks, and sets cup down etc. I have a major gripe though and it's all about the last panel. First off I'm not liking the scratchy hatching to the left of the shadow and lastly you have a white space that takes about 32 seconds to fill in with pencil maybe less since there's seven X's already in there. Just fill the space in.

Good page, keep at it :)

[EddieChingLives]

Nice backgrounds, plot, and pacing. But watch out for the flashy hatching backgrounds. I don't think it fits your style, and would probably be better off left alone.

And the tv in panel one is off perspecitive.