My sequentials suck... but look anyway hehehee

[chaos lord]

http://www.renderosity.com/photos/ArtistArticle4768.jpg

remember i worked from a script

NOOB!

[Grendel]

Well then you should tell the writer to actually write something....There is no Drama or storytelling in this just frames of a moon/ beach /water...and a guy who is looking at us as if he is waiting for some direction....so give him some!. Keep drawing man.;dvl;

[Cuddly]

Hi chaos lord,

Your sequentials don't suck. They just need some work. :)

Here's what I'm reading:

It's night on a beach. It's a full moon and it's a cloudy night. A military man is standing on the beach with his back to a small row boat.

Here's some questions:
1) Is that the full moon and clouds in Panel 1? Or some meteor that's just landed in a cloud of smoke and vapor?

2) What's the significance of the breakers on the rocks in Panel 3?

3) Did the military guy come from the boat? Or is it something he's just found as he was walking on the beach? Footprints in the sand would help with the gap in storytelling here. On the other hand, if the script called for the military guy to just be standing on the beach in a catatonic state, then perhaps showing us the next page in this sequence would help move the story along.

Answer these questions in your art and your storytelling will improve right away. Looking forward to seeing more stuff.

[EddieChingLives]

I like your line-work. Great use of black and white contrast. Work on your panel transitions.

Amazing scanning work! I wish I could scan my work so clear.