A bad surprise

[Caimano]

Two more page of my Chourmo project

Hope you like

Loston: The wheel chair guy in the first panel board 1 is a Williamson character! Just a tribute to the master:o

http://www.guglie.it/images/Tav20.jpg

http://www.guglie.it/images/Tav21.jpg

[Ra Havok]

Sorry for the superficial crit, Caimano; but hey, I'm not expert in storytelling!
Anyway, All I wanted to say is that this is -as could be expected- of high quality. There is one thing that bothers me: Page 2; too little variation in camera distance. A close-up, or panning back would make it much , much better.

[Caimano]

Thanks Ra and welcome back from your Italy vacation...I really hope you enjoyed taly a lot:) ...maybe a bit too hot in this period...

I got your point about page 2, I'll keep it in my mind in the future!

Another 5 pages and my work is finished with this project...I'm a bit tired

[Cuddly]

Simone,

another couple of superb pages. Great stuff!

-Don-

[Justice41]

Great Stuff as usual my friend. The bench in panel 1 page 2 looks a little off. Could be due to no other objects around it to anchor it.
Hey guy I see your double scanning your stuff. Here's a link to Mustek Italy. They have a tabloid scanner (11"x17" scan area) that you may be interested in. This will help with the scanning because scanning in two pieces is just a pain inna butt. here it is. For all you others living in Europe there are links to other countries.
http://www.mustek-rs.it/Categorie.asp?chiave1=A3&campo1=CodCategoria_CAT

[dikiminster]

yeh, superb as per usual! Really like the angle on the last frame..........worms eye view!:D

[flamer]

Yes, great stuff!
I especially like the last panel of the first page. It captures the whole scene in 1 image and carries the tragic feel too.
stupid tiny points:
On the forth panel maybe the guy in the wheelchair is at the wrong angle compared to the man standing (we can see too much of his lap)...but maybe its just me.
Also maybe there are altogether too many shots where the characters are similar distances away from the viewer, basically too many mid-shots make the pages less interesting to look at.
Just my attempt at a crit:)

[Caimano]

Don: Thanks pal, I saw your Ghost board 3...really impressed!

Justice: Thanks for the scanner info!! I'm thinking about it. Tell Frank he has to put your Wraith kick ass imager on the new web site tho!!!

Dikiminster: Thanks

Flamer: good points! as I already told Ra Havok it's a really good suggestion.

Ok guys five boards by the end of August and I'm done with this project....btw next week I'm going to post some inked pages too:p

[Justice41]

I have no say in what Frank does. I have one of those scanners. Let me tell you, to be able to scan in one shot, a full page of art is a blessing. I do large paintings that I have to scan as well. I remember trying to scan and piece together a painting that was on 30"x40" when I had an 8.5"x 11" scanner. It was a nitemare. It would be a wise and valuable investment.