FAE page 1

[eve]

http://users.pandora.be/Decryptor/imgs/FAEpage1small.jpg

C&C ?

[jarrod_101]

I like the look of the first panel. I'd love to see it inked.

I guess what stuck out to me about the whole page is that it's hard to tell what's supposed to be going on. Did someone sneak up on the girl thats peeping? Is this person trying to stop her from approaching the house?


Just my thoughs...

[eve]

yeah, I didn't tell a lot about it, since I wanted to see if people have an idea what's going on ... but that might be too hard in just one page.

What's happening is: 2 elves are looking at a human house, the girl wants to enter, but her friend wants to stop her since they are supposed to hide for humans. Also important I think, is the fact that these elves are way smaller then humans, about 15 inches or so ... which is giving me headaches, lol ... maybe if I made the leaves bigger, that would be more clear.
In panel 2, one of them is pulling the leaves aside, to have a better look at the house.
And in panel 5 the girl flies down (yes, they can fly without having wings :p )

Thanks for the comment, jarrod ! I'm gonna tweak the page a little and then it'll be inked & colored :)