Megacity1: Last pursuit

[flamer]

Hi guys,
new here, thanks to dikiminster for telling me about this forum, I recognise many DW names.
Well, here is a Dredd story I've been doing recently, crit away!:)

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[Phil Clark]

It all looks pretty good and then you get to the colors and everything really comes to life. The only thing that bothers me is that it is pretty interestingly laid out until you get to page 3, panel two.

Dredd smashing the car with the woman running away when drawn from this angle is just... dull. There is no excitement to this panel like there is in the other panels. Maybe if you had placed the camera low so you can see the womans legs (to just above her knees) and see Dredd really slamming into the car. And you could have a piece of the car flying past her leg and maybe breaking the panel boarder of the next panel to kind of link them together. Now that would be exciting.

I just hate to see one panel mess up the flow of the story.

[dikiminster]

Hey, Flamer. Welcome to Penciljack. Now more people will have the pleasure of seeing your stuff!:D

[flamer]

Thanks for the comments Phil, I totally agree now you point it out that page 3 panel 2 would look much better the way you described it. I can picture it now.
Glad you like the colors:)

dikiminster, you're the man!!!:cool: :cool:
can't wait your next post, will it be the next page of your story? Are you writing that yourself?

[dikiminster]

Yes, its the next page of the story, but its abit of a quite one...should be ready wednesday (im back at work now so drawings going a bit slower!). As for writing......thats a bit strong. Its really just a sequence. I see your doing your -one a day- Dredd. Exciting idea and i look forward to reading it as it unravels! Cheers!:D

[saintblais]

i love how graceful the girl is and how clonky dredd is. lovely images.

[flamer]

Thanks saintblais, yeah, dredd is always the the unstopable lumbering arm of the law and she is the elusive chaos. She's hot too, which helps!:D

[brendon]

I like these pages because they break every single rule that a professional 'comic pro' would 'recommend' :D

Seriously though, I like it. I'm just saying that because it doesn't look like the kind of thing I can sit here and critique for it's anatomy, perspective, or anything like that....It's just plain old fun looking!!! I would definitly read it.

Like a previous poster said, I don't think it achieves it's value until after you've colored it. The color adds to the overall value of the art... I hope you finish coloring and show them again!

[flamer]

Thanks Brendon, yeah I agree color is so important to an image, and that's probably especially true in my stuff!
Comics are generally meant to be fun aren't they? Not a drawing method exercise!:D :D

[Nirsus]

Looks great! The only thing I'd add is about page two. The girl jumps off the building facing it and lands facing away. Of course she could perform some acrobatics in between to twist around. But maybe you could drop in a panel showing her twisting around before landing. It's just a bit confusing as it is.

But, I love the style of the art and the colors really pop!

Nirsus

[Caimano]

I saw your Spidey pages before to see these ones and let me say you're improved a lot!!!

I like the style and the camera angles you used in the boards. I really like the Black and White ones because your inking style is really "dynamic". I really enjoyed the trip...did you receive an answer from 2000AD?

[flamer]

Yeah, Spidey was 5 years ago, but I haven't drawn him since.....should have.
Glad you like the more recent Dredd better. I really like your work Caimano, each page has so much to look at. And it looks very accomplished. Looks like each page takes a while to do unless you're freakishly fast. I'd love to see your pages finished and colored.:cool: