The Silver Tower update

[Travis]

Here are two new pages from my comic. I am going to start doing them in watercolor for now on. I cut a few corners, and it actually takes me less time than doing it in Pen&Ink.

Page 30 (http://www.angelfire.com/freak/silvertower/Comic/Page30.html)

Page 31 (http://www.angelfire.com/freak/silvertower/Comic/Page31.html)

[EddieChingLives]

I like page 31 better than page 30. Your word baloons look nicer without all the jazzy sfx. And your coloring is very nice. Great extablishing shot on the bottom. And great panel to panel transitions. Very easy to follow.

Room for Improvement:
I'm not sure coloring word baloons is a good idea. And it's inconsistant. Sometimes the read dude's baloons are green, sometimes not.

Page 30, I just wish there was more drama in there with some perspective shots. Panel 1 looks flat and could use some perspective to show how far down it goes. Panel 2, the cropping looks off, and panel 3, it's hard to tell what's going on, because you drew too small. That's when roughing on smaller paper helps, because when you reproduce it, especially online, people can tell what's going on better.

So work on depth and not drawing so small. And your panel composition. And I can see both in page 31. Great work!

But I gotta give you mad props for making it to issue 31 in the first place. Doing sequence art for 31 pages will help you more than any critique given by me. Dang! You are doing great. Just keep cranking out the stories, and you'll improve more and more each time.

[Travis]

Thanks for the crits, man.

The thing I was trying to acomplish with the word baloons was getting them to blend somewhat with the background. But that doesnt work exactly, because sometimes a baloon covers two pannels. And it is obviously confusing.

It just bothers me to see white baloons. It is they stick out in the page like a sore thumb. I guess I will just have to experiment with that.

I see what you mean with page 30. I could have done a lot more with it. I was just eager to see if this new corner cutting technique would work out, so I could do it in watercolor.

Page 30 I wasn't very happy with just because of the bottom pannel. I had the picture in my mind how I wanted it, but it came out as a much more watered down version of that picture.

I started this comic for the exact reason you mentioned. There is no kind of experience like whipping out a bunch of sequence in a row. I have the general plot of this story scripted out at 13 episodes, about twenty pages an episode. I just wish I didn't have to write it... :(

[EddieChingLives]

Well, if you need someone to help plot out some of your stories, let me know. I'm all game. Drop me an email or instant message sometime.

eddiechinglives@myrealbox.com

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