break on through

[Grendel]

page 1
http://images.deviantart.com/large/indyart/freehand/silence_THEN_boom.jpg

page 2

http://images.deviantart.com/large/indyart/freehand/yeaper.jpg


page 3
http://images.deviantart.com/large/indyart/freehand/breakonthrouhjtotheother.jpg

[benlw]

Great stuff, and like a lot of people have said I do think your pencil work comes off a lot better than your inks - it is far more atmospheric and dramatic.

If I'm gonna nit-pick on this, I don't quite understand the flow from the explosion on page one to the boy looking out of the window in page 2. I am also guessing that the explosion through his window is the shockwave? Panels 3 and 4 on page 2 are also a little hard to decipher. Page 3 is just excellent though. I especially like the last but one panel where the boy's face has become distorted because of the balls having entered him.

I am also - as always - interested in your style. Was this achieved just by pencils and smudging? I only like to use pencils and I do use smuding a lot (it produces such great effects) but smudging softens the drawing, you still manage to keep things quite dark and gutsy - how? And also, what grade of pencils do you use, a lot of the time I use projecting pencils and that might be where I am going wrong - they are too narrow and precise?

Anyways - really, really great stuff. I have recently contacted TY Gorton about getting hold of a copy of the womb - keep us posted if you produce any other comics. I think its safe to say that you have got yourself a fan!

[Grendel]

I use pencil and eraser ..i paint with the eraser...i use mechanical pencils and 3-8b for sifferent tones and line widths...to be hohnest i dont undestand how the first apge flows into the second but im drawing form a script...the last panel on page one does suck I think i got a better explsion on page 2 in his eye...

[Grendel]

page 4
http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/pge44.jpg



page 5
http://igrendel.com/images/pencils/55.jpg

[Caimano]

Grendel, as always the thing I like most is the style, really interesting. the problem I see with the pages is the storytelling...it's not easy understand what's going on and it's not because the situation is so surreal, but more because I can't see what's the object drew in the panel are: for example the last two panels in the page 4.

Just my opinion tho

[brendon]

I didn't have any problem understanding any of it, I think it looks great. But I do agree that certain panels, maybe 2 or 3 of them, are a little foggy. A person who's new to reading comics, not an artist, or not a good guessor, would probably have a hard time understanding some of these pages. Remember that an artist's and story teller's job is to convey some type of idea in a way that others can understand it.
But in my personal opinion I wouldn't change a thing. I like the way it looks, and I wouldn't ink it either. It would be awesome if you just produced it in pencil, black & white. Inking would just waste all of that awesome pencil gradient.

overall score from 1 to 10, I give it an 8.5

good job :)

[Killer_gym_sox]

i cant see page 3 =(..

hey when you put these into a sequential do you do the original drawings on full sizes of paper and then individually place them in order and all that. When i was looking at it thats what it seemed