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Super Rats
06-16-2003, 08:02 AM
These are roughs of the first three pages of a story. I know most people put up finished pages (sorry for posting roughs), but I figured I'd be more open to changing a panel or the layout of a page, or even drawing a new one, if the pencils were only up to like the 2nd stage of drawing.:o

Page 1:
http://www.happysoda.com/art/orangepop/OPRS-01p.jpg

Page 2:
http://www.happysoda.com/art/orangepop/OPRS-02p.jpg
Super Rats
06-16-2003, 08:03 AM
Page 3:
http://www.happysoda.com/art/orangepop/OPRS-03p.jpg
emerican patriot
06-16-2003, 10:29 PM
i dont really like animé, this isnt bad though. i do like its cartoon simplicity. In panel four the book's title folows wrong perspective, its slanted opposite direction the book slants. Other than that i think the angle of the last panel on teh second page is too drastic. I like that it isnt a dead on normal thing, but if it werent so crooked it would look better. peace.