View Full Version : Playing around...whatcha' think?
06-12-2003, 01:53 PM
Hello all! In what little time I have lately between planning our wedding, magazine layout, and illustrating a friend's children's book, I've been playing around with a new style of drawing comics (for me:) ). I'm hoping to get some feedback from you guys as to whether or not this is worth pursuing. I'm a Disney geek, so I kinda wanted to try a style based on theirs, with the cell-shaded characters and rendered backgrounds. Panel 2 is about the only one I have halfway finished, but I went ahead and included my bluelines. Please blast away, and thanks in advance to any replies!
P.S. I'm also doing this ENTIRELY in Photoshop, which is kind of neat.
06-12-2003, 08:34 PM
Congratulations on the wedding...
and the Children's book...
and the magazine layout...
You know, I hate you! Just kidding. But seriously, I'm glad you got some nice knotches under your belt.
Nice coloring and clear line-work. Really good job. Nice detailed realistic and convincing backgrounds.
Althought, in the fully rendered colored shot, the detailed rendered colors kind of clash with the 2 tone colors.
Also, you have flow problems. Panel two blocks a lot of panel one. When you get to panel three, which panel should we look at next? Do we go below or to the right.
And also, it took me a little while to finally figure out what's going on. The panel with the thug with the knife... I think it would have worked better as a three shot. Showing the spacial relationship from where he is compared to the other two.
Let's look at it in Panel to Panel Progression:
Panel 1 to Panel 2 to Panel 3 . You make a complete 180degree turn and then go 180degrees back. Quite a jump cut.
Panel 3 to Panel 4 to Panel 5? Im not sure which way to go at first, but I think you want us to read down then right. The panel placement is confusing, and you should have shown the spacial relationships between all three characters. What happens to the blondie? He gets cut out in the next panel. Is he bizy with the blade man?
The last two panels, I gotta give you props. A nice zoom transition, done very well.
Art-wise, you're very good.
Storytelling, you got some things that need to be clearer. Work on the eye flow and panel to panel progression. Be sure to establish where characters are in relation to one another.
Is it something you should pursue? Only you can answer that question. You gotta do this out of pure love. Just worry about pleasing yourself. Because even the pro's can't please everyone on these boards.
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