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06-05-2003, 11:18 PM
i dont feel like typing anything about it.. so just look.
edit* page 7 added
06-06-2003, 05:03 AM
I didn't feel like typing anything. I just looked.
06-06-2003, 11:05 AM
Panel 4: All the ninjas stop typing and look...
...directly at her crotch:p
06-06-2003, 02:56 PM
nice costume there. Love her costume.. if it were more revealing though.. jk man its good!
06-07-2003, 07:26 PM
yeh this is awesome work, keep it up!!
06-09-2003, 02:54 PM
I think the door could use some more distinctive marks and the movement in panel 3 should be emphasized. As it is, it took me a while to realize that at first she enters the empty wagon, then the ninjas follow her and THEN she turns to talk to them.
Another problem I see is the overlapping of the second panel over the ones to its right. Although it looks quite cool, it almost makes it seem like those happen before the second panel (and since her stance is very similar, the effect is enhanced).
All in all, great pencils. The dark spots are great and I love the overall style.
06-09-2003, 03:23 PM
OK....First Impression-----IT LOOKS FANTASTIC!!
Now for some problems I see.....
1. Is this the first page? Where are they? A bus? a plane? If this is your establishing shot....We could use a little more information.
2. In the full shot of the female ninja....Is her left arm too LONG? It's close ....maybe because of her pose but her hand is almost down to her knee. And her crotch is a little "bulgy" for a woman.
3. As was mentioned...in the 2nd to last last panel all of the ninja are staring at her crotch...I see a perspective problem.....The way you show it, she is either twice as tall as the ninja's or she is standing on a box or all of the ninja are crouching down low.
The horizon line should pass through the same portion of the body on people that are the same height no matter how far they are off in the distance. In other words, if you have a picture of a six foot man and teh horizon line passes athrough him at eye level....You can add a six foot man at some distance in the backround and the horizon line will pass through his eyes also, only his feet will rise closer to the horizon line....
Here it seems the horizon line passes through her shoulders, yet it passess about two head heights over the ninjas heads. If the girl is roughly the same size as the Ninjas - the horizon line should be two relative head sizes above her head......
I hope you understand what I mean.
But this is nice clean work that is fun to look at......GOOD STUFF!!!
06-09-2003, 05:51 PM
she's just an incredible tall bitch *cough* freak *cough*
Great job. No need to see where they are, cause they're on a train. simple as that.
GREAT linework spyda. like always !
06-09-2003, 06:54 PM
aww CW... u did evenread to subject line. the is page 6. hehe
they're on a train, u hit it on the nose Spider_Wal, and she is tall, but the ninjas are kneeling. you'll see them on pg 7
06-14-2003, 07:32 PM
well than show that page ,fool! :cool:
06-16-2003, 02:53 PM
looks some someones been watching that samurai flick "the hunted"...this scene reminds me of it tons,,,even with the ninja chick.
very strong pencils on this one..you got skills!!!
06-30-2003, 03:29 PM
...never heard of the hunted.. but ok. heres pg 7
06-30-2003, 05:07 PM
i always like your art
07-01-2003, 06:06 AM
spyda, nice page..
i cant believe you havnt heard of "the hunted". it has christopher lambert in it,,,go rent it, you will see EXACTLY what i mean.
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