Spidey
06-03-2003, 07:05 AM
This is my first attempt at a comic script. The funny thing is I did it completly impovised. I figured this was the only way to do it cuz if I tryed to sit down and plan evrything ahead I would never get to writing it. I did do some research as I went along. It took me about 4 hours to complete cuz I kept going back to fix stuff that didn't make sense. I hope I get a chance to illustrate this someday soon.
Note: The (P) means new panel. Also I got the script format from Blambot.com.
King of Diamonds.
An improvisational script by Oscar Padilla.
Page 1
(P) Longshot. We're outside a fictional Las Vegas Casino, the King of Diamonds.
It’s a popular casino amongst the more refined, prestigious groups.
There’s a white hummer with a chromed viper as a hood ornament parked in front.
Valet: Don't worry sir; your vehicle will be well taking care of. You have my word.
(P) Midshot. We see rich diamond tycoon and King of diamonds casino owner, Wilfred B. Mansley talking with valet. Mansley is surrounded by 4 bodyguards. Valet is incredibly happy; he has a wad of cash in his hands.
Mansley: It’d better be son or you won't have a tongue to spit promises anymore.
(P) Midshot. Show Mansley being escorted inside just before the main entrance.
Bodyguard: Mr. Azeros has been spotted inside Mr. Mansley.
Mansley: Good. I've been waiting for this moment for a long time.
Page 2
(P) Bird’s eye view. We see valet pulling hummer into parking spot.
Radio/ 50 cent lyrics: You say you a gangsta
But you neva pop nothin
You say you a wangsta
and you need to stop frontin…
(P) Midshot. Valet outside of vehicle; activating alarm. Staring at wad of green. We see a dark figure behind him.
Valet: Easiest rent money ever!
(P) CU. We see valet with rag over mouth. He has a shocked expression.
Valet: MPHHH! MPHMBAPHUMM!!!
(P) Same shot. Valet is being dragged away into darkness by mysterious figure. Valet’s body is limp.
(P) CU. We see money spread all over floor by cars.
Mysterious figure: Easiest victim yet.
Page 3
(P) Longshot. We see the interior of the King of Diamonds. It’s very busy. We have a rear view of one of the crap tables. It’s very crowded.
Dealer: Eleven. You win.
(P) Wide shot. Show view in front of table. Devin Azeros is in the foreground. The rest of the crowd is cheering like mad. Show Devin with cheesy smile looking at sexy female to his right.
Dealer: New come out roll.
Devin: This one’s for you doll face!
(P) Worm’s eye view from table. Devin’s arm is stretched out. Dice rolling. We can see the rest of the crowd with an anxious expression on their faces.
(P) Wide panel. We see the rear of a dark figure in the foreground. In the background; again we see the frantic crowd.
Dealer: Seven. You win.
Crowd: Yeah! Yeehaw! Yes! Woot!
(P) Overhead view. We see the silhouetted figure approaching from behind Devin. We see Devin scooting a good pile of chips to the “Pass line” on the table.
Devin: Daddy’s gonna clear out the house!
(P) CU. We see Mansley with a very wicked look on his face.
Mansley: Well, aren’t we feeling lucky tonight.
Page 4
(P) Interior shot of Hummer in parking lot. We find out that the dark figure was Eris Faulkner or Scarlet Ghost as dubbed by his organization. He is searching through an attached laptop on the Hummer’s dashboard controls. He’s is talking to his mission director; Kiera Finni or Cyberlass who is briefing him as he searches the Hummer.
Scarlet Ghost: Wow this guy almost has his whole business on this laptop.
Cyberlass: Yeah yeah, I told you he was an idiot. An idiot who thinks he’s invincible. Now hurry and get everything you can on the Clemens’ case.
(P) CU of laptop screen.
Scarlet Ghost: You know I think I’m just gonna go ahead and nab the whole hard drive.
It shouldn’t take me more than 2 minutes.
Cyberlass: There’s no way you… wait you got that new extractor from Purple right?
(P) MCU on Scarlet Ghost.
Scarlet Ghost: Pfft. Purple doesn’t even know about this bad boy.
Cyberlass: Well either way you need to hurry. You don’t know if Mansley has some kind of alert system for his laptop and the other Valets are gonna start wondering what happened their buddy soon too.
(P) MCU from different angle looking outside of Hummer.
Scarlet Ghost: As soon as I get these back to HQ Mansley is gonna curse the day he got involved with Mr. Clemens.
Cyberlass: Roger that.
Page 5
(P) MCU. Back in the casino. Devin has a spooked expression.
Devin: Wha-what are you doing here? I thought you were in hiding cuz of the Cleme-
(P) CU on Mansley. He looks pissed. He’s signaling one of his guards.
Mansley: You wish you could avoid me as easily boy! You think the Feds scare me?
You owe me something very precious and I hope for your sake and everyone you know that I receive it by midnight tomorrow.
(P) One of Mansley’s guards pulls out a small video device. Through it you can make out Devin’s daughter, blindfolded.
Mansley: See, given your situation you have very limited options.
Daughter: Daddy! Please help me. I’m scared. Daddy, where are you!?
(P) Devin enraged lunges at Mansley. His guards hold him just a few inches away from his face.
Devin: You won’t get away with this you fat sonuvabitch! If you hurt her so help me God I’ll rip your ****in’ heart out!
(P) CU of Mansley with a smug look on his face.
Mansley: But m’boy, I already have. I suggest you get on with your newly received agenda. And leave your winnings; I’ll take them as recompense for all the trouble you’ve put me through.
(P) Wide panel. We see Devin in the foreground leaving the crap tables. In the BG we see Mansley starting up a new craps game. Devin’s expression is distraught and almost lifeless.
Page 6
(P) CU on laptop download bar. It’s at 100%.
Scarlet Ghost: Booyah!
(P) Show Scarlet packing away his equipment and closing the laptop.
Cyberlass: I take it the file finished transferring.
Scarlet Ghost: Without a hitch.
Cyberlass: Good. Then report back to HQ and we’ll get started on our retaliation.
Scarlet Ghost: Roger. End transmission.
(P) We see Scarlet beginning to exit the Hummer by the passenger door and looking at the backseat.
Scarlet Ghost: Oops. Almost forgot about you.
(P) We see Scarlet’s back. He’s hunched over the Valet on the outside of the vehicle.
Scarlet Ghost: There we go. Sorry kid, but today isn’t your lucky day.
(P) We see the same shot sans Scarlet. The Valet is sitting back against the rear tire of the Hummer. In his hand is a whiskey bottle that Scarlet conveniently placed. He is still knocked out.
Page 7
(P) Scarlet jumping over fence to ally. Guards at a nearby check don’t seem to notice Scarlet in the shadows.
(P) We see scarlet by his bike in a dark alley.
Scarlet Ghost: Wow, that was almost too easy.
(P) We see Scarlet mounting his bike.
Scarlet Ghost: Oh well. I’m not complaining.
(P) Huge panel. We see Scarlet popping a wheelie on his sweet crotch rocket. He lighted by the moon alone.
Caption: To be continued…
Note: The (P) means new panel. Also I got the script format from Blambot.com.
King of Diamonds.
An improvisational script by Oscar Padilla.
Page 1
(P) Longshot. We're outside a fictional Las Vegas Casino, the King of Diamonds.
It’s a popular casino amongst the more refined, prestigious groups.
There’s a white hummer with a chromed viper as a hood ornament parked in front.
Valet: Don't worry sir; your vehicle will be well taking care of. You have my word.
(P) Midshot. We see rich diamond tycoon and King of diamonds casino owner, Wilfred B. Mansley talking with valet. Mansley is surrounded by 4 bodyguards. Valet is incredibly happy; he has a wad of cash in his hands.
Mansley: It’d better be son or you won't have a tongue to spit promises anymore.
(P) Midshot. Show Mansley being escorted inside just before the main entrance.
Bodyguard: Mr. Azeros has been spotted inside Mr. Mansley.
Mansley: Good. I've been waiting for this moment for a long time.
Page 2
(P) Bird’s eye view. We see valet pulling hummer into parking spot.
Radio/ 50 cent lyrics: You say you a gangsta
But you neva pop nothin
You say you a wangsta
and you need to stop frontin…
(P) Midshot. Valet outside of vehicle; activating alarm. Staring at wad of green. We see a dark figure behind him.
Valet: Easiest rent money ever!
(P) CU. We see valet with rag over mouth. He has a shocked expression.
Valet: MPHHH! MPHMBAPHUMM!!!
(P) Same shot. Valet is being dragged away into darkness by mysterious figure. Valet’s body is limp.
(P) CU. We see money spread all over floor by cars.
Mysterious figure: Easiest victim yet.
Page 3
(P) Longshot. We see the interior of the King of Diamonds. It’s very busy. We have a rear view of one of the crap tables. It’s very crowded.
Dealer: Eleven. You win.
(P) Wide shot. Show view in front of table. Devin Azeros is in the foreground. The rest of the crowd is cheering like mad. Show Devin with cheesy smile looking at sexy female to his right.
Dealer: New come out roll.
Devin: This one’s for you doll face!
(P) Worm’s eye view from table. Devin’s arm is stretched out. Dice rolling. We can see the rest of the crowd with an anxious expression on their faces.
(P) Wide panel. We see the rear of a dark figure in the foreground. In the background; again we see the frantic crowd.
Dealer: Seven. You win.
Crowd: Yeah! Yeehaw! Yes! Woot!
(P) Overhead view. We see the silhouetted figure approaching from behind Devin. We see Devin scooting a good pile of chips to the “Pass line” on the table.
Devin: Daddy’s gonna clear out the house!
(P) CU. We see Mansley with a very wicked look on his face.
Mansley: Well, aren’t we feeling lucky tonight.
Page 4
(P) Interior shot of Hummer in parking lot. We find out that the dark figure was Eris Faulkner or Scarlet Ghost as dubbed by his organization. He is searching through an attached laptop on the Hummer’s dashboard controls. He’s is talking to his mission director; Kiera Finni or Cyberlass who is briefing him as he searches the Hummer.
Scarlet Ghost: Wow this guy almost has his whole business on this laptop.
Cyberlass: Yeah yeah, I told you he was an idiot. An idiot who thinks he’s invincible. Now hurry and get everything you can on the Clemens’ case.
(P) CU of laptop screen.
Scarlet Ghost: You know I think I’m just gonna go ahead and nab the whole hard drive.
It shouldn’t take me more than 2 minutes.
Cyberlass: There’s no way you… wait you got that new extractor from Purple right?
(P) MCU on Scarlet Ghost.
Scarlet Ghost: Pfft. Purple doesn’t even know about this bad boy.
Cyberlass: Well either way you need to hurry. You don’t know if Mansley has some kind of alert system for his laptop and the other Valets are gonna start wondering what happened their buddy soon too.
(P) MCU from different angle looking outside of Hummer.
Scarlet Ghost: As soon as I get these back to HQ Mansley is gonna curse the day he got involved with Mr. Clemens.
Cyberlass: Roger that.
Page 5
(P) MCU. Back in the casino. Devin has a spooked expression.
Devin: Wha-what are you doing here? I thought you were in hiding cuz of the Cleme-
(P) CU on Mansley. He looks pissed. He’s signaling one of his guards.
Mansley: You wish you could avoid me as easily boy! You think the Feds scare me?
You owe me something very precious and I hope for your sake and everyone you know that I receive it by midnight tomorrow.
(P) One of Mansley’s guards pulls out a small video device. Through it you can make out Devin’s daughter, blindfolded.
Mansley: See, given your situation you have very limited options.
Daughter: Daddy! Please help me. I’m scared. Daddy, where are you!?
(P) Devin enraged lunges at Mansley. His guards hold him just a few inches away from his face.
Devin: You won’t get away with this you fat sonuvabitch! If you hurt her so help me God I’ll rip your ****in’ heart out!
(P) CU of Mansley with a smug look on his face.
Mansley: But m’boy, I already have. I suggest you get on with your newly received agenda. And leave your winnings; I’ll take them as recompense for all the trouble you’ve put me through.
(P) Wide panel. We see Devin in the foreground leaving the crap tables. In the BG we see Mansley starting up a new craps game. Devin’s expression is distraught and almost lifeless.
Page 6
(P) CU on laptop download bar. It’s at 100%.
Scarlet Ghost: Booyah!
(P) Show Scarlet packing away his equipment and closing the laptop.
Cyberlass: I take it the file finished transferring.
Scarlet Ghost: Without a hitch.
Cyberlass: Good. Then report back to HQ and we’ll get started on our retaliation.
Scarlet Ghost: Roger. End transmission.
(P) We see Scarlet beginning to exit the Hummer by the passenger door and looking at the backseat.
Scarlet Ghost: Oops. Almost forgot about you.
(P) We see Scarlet’s back. He’s hunched over the Valet on the outside of the vehicle.
Scarlet Ghost: There we go. Sorry kid, but today isn’t your lucky day.
(P) We see the same shot sans Scarlet. The Valet is sitting back against the rear tire of the Hummer. In his hand is a whiskey bottle that Scarlet conveniently placed. He is still knocked out.
Page 7
(P) Scarlet jumping over fence to ally. Guards at a nearby check don’t seem to notice Scarlet in the shadows.
(P) We see scarlet by his bike in a dark alley.
Scarlet Ghost: Wow, that was almost too easy.
(P) We see Scarlet mounting his bike.
Scarlet Ghost: Oh well. I’m not complaining.
(P) Huge panel. We see Scarlet popping a wheelie on his sweet crotch rocket. He lighted by the moon alone.
Caption: To be continued…