page 3 of six

[rottenart]

well, as promised, here is a rough layout of page three of my story, called "the party" it's on 11x14 paper in my sketchbook, so i apologize for the lightness.

ok, so i finished these roughs a bit more so you could see them better.

i'm waiting on my pro paper so i can do proper finishes to submit around!

c&c expected!

page three (http://www.deviantart.com/view/2086770)

[EddieChingLives]

I like the first three panels. It seems like the more you get into the page, the more unfinished it gets. Consistancy. You've heard me rant about that enough on your other post.

But it's easy to follow, until you get to the SPLOOSH panel. I don't know if he is giving the lady water. Hell, I don't even know what is SPLOOSH-ing. But I have A.D.D.

I see you like using the four moment to moment panels. You're using it pretty nicely too. Good job.

[rottenart]

i'm glad you are taking the time to check these out, man!

i'm a bit worried about the moment to moment thing, but it's used on two non-consecutive pages so i hope it doesn't seem like over use.

sorry bout the unfinished thing...i don't tend to do many thumbnails as i can erase to my hearts content in my pad so ...

when i have a good idea what's in a panel i'll just barely sketch

i'm currently waiting on a shipment of blueline so in a week or so i'll post the finished product...

thanks for the crits!