lullaby 4, and pages of mexicatl

[Elsevilla]

this one is for an entry at dark horse colors by raulman

http://www.deviantart.com/view/1999015

pages of Mexicatl comic, these pages are drawn in a smaller size than oficial size, to draw more faster, are made in a bigger than letter size, what do you think of storytelling

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/1868633 pag 8
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/1889386 pag 9
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/1930299 pag 10
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/1998990 pag 11

[protagon]

A couple corrections on the text of your story:

"Red will forever loose control" should read "lose control."
Unless you mean she's letting control run loose, which is cool but weird.
Also, I think you mean immune, rather than inmune? What is a caramel conspiracy? I like the way it sounds but I'm not sure I get its meaning. In previous pages maybe.

One more comment, I would get rid of the red words. They distract me because I always think they're going to be the ones that rhyme, but they don't. I would just let the dialogue stand without emphasis.

The art is good, I always feel with your work that if you really put a lot of time into a piece it could be way better, but this is very consistent and appealing. Good job, it's going to be tough going against you in Strip Search.

[Wishmaster]

*bump*

WHY the hell is no-one posting here?

Damn.. fantastic art, i've been a fan of your work, and it shows once again.. Very nice style as allways, dunno about storytelling, but it looks just fine to me! awesome stuff...

I'm not to keen on the colors though..

Keep it up dude!

( perhaps it's placed in the wrong section? this screams for more replies guys..)

[DARKSTORMGRAPHIX]

INCREDIBLE WORK!!!!!

What size boards are you drawing on? Very curious.

Thanks for sharing these beautiful pages. Great storytelling as well!!

Shade

[Elsevilla]

hey protagon you are right on those words i will change them, and the red colors yeah they distract too, and dark storm the lullaby page its made smaller than a letter size thats why i can add to many details its very small the other pages are made in 20 x 31 cm i dont know what in inches are but its half than the oficial size of double letter i made then smaller to finish them faster, and yeah protagon i dont sketch for every panel shot i only leave the pencil move, mayb if i had some time i will make them look better, personally i dont like my pencils either, im trying to be better, and thaxs wish master im glad you like it :D thanxs guys

[WarLocKsS]

nice.

WarLocKsS

[MankindRam]

Nice job as usual El. Your work kicks ass.

Ram

[Elsevilla]

mankindram and warlocks thanxs a lot

[danimation2001]

Like I keep say, I want to buy your comic the momment it gets published. :]

[pencil_boy]

Good luck on the dark horse thing El, you've got a great chance.

Out of all the artists on the board, you draw more than everyone else I can think of. Everytime you post, its like three or four at a time. I wish I drew that much.

[Seed]

Top notch !

I'd like to collab with you on something !!
Any covers that need colors or something ? :D

I love ur style !
Very good expressions on the page where this lady dies.
Sometimes you have lil issues iwth the perspective of the eyes...but everything else's fine :D

Bye
Seed

[Elsevilla]

i hope we get it published dan, heheh cool nick under your dan avatar, and thanxs seed i will be honored if we work together on something i luv your work too

[penciljack]

Nice stuff, Elsevilla. In the future, please remember to post your work in the appropriate forum, okay? This stuff pretty obviously belongs in Storytelling & Sequential Art.

[Seed]

whoa you know my art ?
-Cool

Erm yeah just call me and maybe we can find something that we could do.

Seed

[Wishmaster]

I really wanna see Seed on this stuff man, you'll make an awesoooome couple, kill me, but i really don't like the colors as they are now.. Seed will kill these pages! really, i'd LOVE to see some of your work together in the very near future!

[Elsevilla]

sorry penciljacki done another mistake theres another post of lullaby full story on the drawing board, sorry again, and yeah it will be a lot of fun if i cant do something with seed, i almost finish mexicatl pages im doing right now the 13 page and its a story of 24 pages i almost there,thanxs again