submission page 5

[tomek]

the last page of my submission script is ready
pages 1-4 are here (http://www.penciljack.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=31378)

don't forget to leave a comment...
page 5
http://www.droidtropolis.com/MV_5_low.jpg

[TheFightingFoetus]

The drawings are pretty good. Panel 7 looks familiar...

Main crit would be that the center section of the page would be really hard to letter. Those panels are really cluttered, man.

The monster's neck looks a little wierd in panel 6, also.

[Ian Miller]

Tomek,
You talked about a submission script in your post, but did you pencil that page? If so, I really like it. It's neat how different line thicknesses are used for certain details. It's really clear and easy to understand. This would look really awesome inked and colored.

[tomek]

Originally posted by UniverseX259
Tomek,
You talked about a submission script in your post, but did you pencil that page? If so, I really like it. It's neat how different line thicknesses are used for certain details. It's really clear and easy to understand. This would look really awesome inked and colored.
thanks universe! sure, this are my pencils. the editor i did it for offerd me a job, i'm doing some character designs for him and hope getting hired as a penciler...