4-page Caveman in outer space

[Reilly]

Hey guys, this is my first post here. I just wanted to show you a 4-page story I submitted to SPX about my character Orath the Intergalactic Caveman. This isn't the first story with him, so there's not much of an introduction.
Also, there are a few typos that I need to fix, but I'll get around to that later.
Anyway, let me know what you think.

http://www.oddgodpress.com/reillybrown/junk/ospx1.html

--Reilly

[tomek]

your shoulder and arm anatomy needs some work, but storytelling and face expressions are superb. and if it's your story, i enjoy your kind of humor. so post more soon!

[EddieChingLives]

I'm suprised you haven't gotten more responses here. These are great. Great establishment shots. Great story. Great backgrounds. Your figure work could be a bit more consistante in the first page, but the other pages are on target and are wonderfully paced, written, and inked. Great stuff, Reilly.

[Reilly]

Originally posted by tomek
your shoulder and arm anatomy needs some work, but storytelling and face expressions are superb. and if it's your story, i enjoy your kind of humor. so post more soon!

Thanks a lot, but just out of curiosity, what is wrong with my shoulder and arm anatomy? I've heard that before, but no ones ever told me where the problem is exactly. I look at anatomy books and stuff. . .

Anyway, if you guys want to see more of my stuff, check out the sequential page of my website: www.oddgodpress.com/reillybrown

--Reilly

[Folgore]

I'm going to put in my one cents about the shoulder and arm, because I think I see what he means.

Page 1, panel 2 - Orath's shoulder seems to merge right into his bicep with no real muscle seperation.

Page 3, panel 7 - The shoulder/bicep area again seem a little under-defined (as opposed to a nicely done shoulder and bicep on panel 2 of the same page.) Also, the wrist and hand in this panel seem a bit too short. By looking at other panels on these four pages, its obvious you DO know how to draw the arm - it just seems that in certain instances, your arm and hand anatomy are a little off.

I just mentioned to clarify what I think tomek was getting at. The storytelling is excellent, and this is a really, really nice read. I'm browsing your site as we speak, and liking what I see. Keep it up.

[brykken]

I absolutly love it! I'm really looking forward to more. Your other artwork is fabulous. What school do you go to?

[Reilly]

Thanks for the input Fulgore. Arms are tough to draw because every time they twist or bend the muscles all bulge in different ways. I guess I have to keep practicing.

Brykken; I'm about to graduate from the Communication Arts College of Virginia Commonwealth University. That's why I's gots to start learning to draw stuff good, so's that I can get me a job.

--Reilly

[tomek]

Originally posted by Folgore
I'm going to put in my one cents about the shoulder and arm, because I think I see what he means.

Page 1, panel 2 - Orath's shoulder seems to merge right into his bicep with no real muscle seperation.

Page 3, panel 7 - The shoulder/bicep area again seem a little under-defined (as opposed to a nicely done shoulder and bicep on panel 2 of the same page.) Also, the wrist and hand in this panel seem a bit too short. By looking at other panels on these four pages, its obvious you DO know how to draw the arm - it just seems that in certain instances, your arm and hand anatomy are a little off.

that's exactly what i mean, folgore, thanks bud. the point is, these are just little flaws, i'm sure you can fix it rapidly, reilly. you have a great concept, and potential!