An MS Paint Sequential

[A-jack]

my first attempt at an ms paint sequential. http://www.deviantart.com/view/1772828

[A-jack]

i'll try that again...

click (http://www.deviantart.com/view/1772828)

[A-jack]

c'mon people. no responses? is it that bad?i kno its on paint but its a sequential isnt it?

[chynco]

theres not much i can say abotu this page.

I can tell what's going on, sorta. although the fact that the beast and the "master race" looka lmost exactly alike. what's he supposed to be doing in the second to last panel? contemplating? and who's foot is that? is that a hoof? where'd the horse come from? or is it the lower half of that devilish guy, he doesnt seem to have hooves int eh last panel.

i don't really like the red design around the page.

[EddieChingLives]

I'd reply if I could see the pic...I still can't see your pic.
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Ok everybody. I admit it. I'm a frickin' moron. How hard could it be to click on "click".

Speaking of which, I think you've done a better job than my mspaint stuff, quality wise. But I think the beast doesn't give a scary first impression. There's several options you might try.

Saving the appearance for the next page and have a big shot. Making his appearance be a page turner.

You could make it a two shot of the fighter and the beast so you can see what the size difference is between the two.

I hope this helps. Great job on ms paint.

[TheFightingFoetus]

Panel4 is confusing. Not sure what I'm looking at, is it the blond dude's foot?

Nice work though, especially for MS-paint. The coloring is pretty tight...