View Full Version : Inked Sequential by Eonprez
04-23-2003, 12:33 AM
1 page of Original Amber Story Penciled by Freddie Williams II.
Also, I was trying something new on this page...The only thing I used a ruler or french curve for was the panel borders and some of the long stroke cross hatching in the curtains. The rest of the line art was inked with a 102 nib....and I filled in blacks with a bruch of course.
Sorry for the size...Freddie is so detailed the only way you can truely get a handle on the level of his coolness is to view his stuff at @ least 800 pixels wide. I know the scan is not that good either. The original actually does look better than this.
Eonprez (Brett Thompson's) Inks:
04-23-2003, 08:22 AM
your inking is top notch
04-23-2003, 08:40 AM
those hieroglyphics must have driven you mad.
04-23-2003, 08:50 AM
The hieroglyphics were not that bad. I had a little fun with them...I put in there somewhare a diamond with an S on one of the columns. What drove me mad was after scanning it last night the details of the trees (fern looking trees) didn't translate on screen. Those were my favorite parts of the page to ink.
Also, you'll notice the the stone floor in the last panel was altered slightly to convey more accurate perspective.
I am curious what people's opinion are on this change. Should the inker take such liberties as this? I did because 1) it didn't effect the original pencils and 2) it looks correct. Also, I forgot to mention that I did use a circle template to ink the curvey swords held by the guards.
04-23-2003, 10:14 AM
This kicks so much @$$!
Your inks have come really really far in just a few months!
This is phenominal, I am a bit embarased about that floor, now that I see it again (these pencils being done a while ago) I realize how off it is... but I think your fix worked great!
I give it 3 thumbs up!
(Had to borrow a thumb to rate it :))
Keep up the good, um I mean GREAT work!
04-23-2003, 10:19 AM
Have you seen Gregg's Cameron Cover inks yet? They look niiiice! I think I made the right choice going with him...now if he could just speed up. JK.
I'm trying to convince him to post a friendly competition in the Arena section here.
Thanks for the compliments. I'm starting on another page tonight.
04-23-2003, 10:38 AM
"I am curious what people's opinion are on this change. Should the inker take such liberties as this? I did because 1) it didn't effect the original pencils and 2) it looks correct. Also, I forgot to mention that I did use a circle template to ink the curvey swords held by the guards."
im decently good friends with a professional inker named Chris Dreier, hes no big name, he did the angel miniseries for DARKHORSE and a few issues of LADY DEATH , but he did do a HOW TO INK column in SKETCH magazine and this actually makes me think of something he used my art for in that magazine, where he showed how to ink incorrect pencils, he told me to draw with horrible perspective and to keep it very simple. His biggest advice in the matter was, that its better to fix it, cuz your job is to make the penciller look good, but he always said to ask your editor before making major changes to a page
04-23-2003, 02:06 PM
Thanks Slacker! And since I was also then editor I guess I had my approval to make the changes. By the way, I liked the Angel Mini. What issue of sketch was it that this tutorial in?
04-23-2003, 02:11 PM
I have not seen Gregg's inks, he is hard for me to get ahold of... are they on a url that you could send to me?
How many pages has he inked?
04-23-2003, 02:18 PM
i dont remember what # offhand , but it has the chick that draws all the star wars comics on the cover weilding a light sabre, the inking thing is in the back, and its by CHRIS DREIER pencils(they suck) by jack gulmire, they even give me some sh*t in the article, but its all in good fun, ill find out the exact number for you
04-23-2003, 02:34 PM
I posted a comparison in the Arena section that has mine and Gregg's cover inks next to each other. Look in the arena section for it.
Slacker...Thanks...I wouldn't mind reading that article. Can I find it online somewhere?
04-23-2003, 04:09 PM
The Star Wars chick is Jan Duursema and unless I'm crazy the issue is #14.
04-23-2003, 04:51 PM
04-27-2003, 11:47 AM
hey eon, did you ever find that issue of sketch?
04-27-2003, 02:02 PM
04-28-2003, 12:54 AM
Sorry...I haven't been to the comic shop since that post was made...I'll probably be going this week.
04-29-2003, 12:14 PM
Your inks here are nice and clean with a confident line. Everything is rather flat though. the pencils have this problem but you haven't really added depth or a feeling of three dimensions. The objects and figure have a cut out and pasted on feel to them. The page has a rather bitty feel to it with no real consistency to the spotting of blacks or use of lineweights. Some of the areas that are particular probems are:
Panel 1- The way the water is rendered it appears to be sloping downhill. :)
Panel 2- There's no real separation between foreground and background.
Panel 3- The tree to the left of the central column is completely flat. It looks more like a graphic element than an organic growth. The really heavy underline on the curtain at extreme left really kills the depth here.
Panel 4- The level of detail here is rather unbalanced. The textures on the pyramid, tree, column and bread all produce a very similar level of grey. Overlaying similar tones like this creates another flattening effect. Also the way the pattern on the column id rendered makes it look flat rather than rounded. You're not really leading the eye to the most important part of the picture here unless it's the basket in the foreground. That's rendered far more interestingly than the figures which I assume are the intended focus.
Oh, changing the floor was the right thing to do. It was pretty bad in the pencils.
You have a decent line, Brett, but you need to work more on the thought processes behind the marks you make than on the marks themselves. Ask yourself what you're trying to achieve with each line you're puting on the paper and if it's not adding anything don't make the mark.
Keep at it.
04-29-2003, 12:19 PM
Your other thread seems to be locked for some reason so I'll post some quick comments here. That page is better than the one here. You have some better and more consistent lines. The depth is generally much better. You're still handicapped by the way the penciller draws the tiles though. :)
04-29-2003, 09:15 PM
Well that's what I asked for...thanks Robin. You might want to check the updated post for the second page...I changed the tiles on the floor to make it look more correct.
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