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[CHIZ]

yeah. i know its in spanish,but if i can get some tips,:)

http://www.preurbano.com/images/382.jpg

http://www.preurbano.com/images/382b.jpg

[PanzerBanana]

Looks cool......but I only understood "amigos". =)

[CHIZ]

http://www.preurbano.com/images/382c.jpg

http://www.preurbano.com/images/382d.jpg


2 more:)

[EasyRider]

Looks pretty cool so far, as far as art style. As far as storytelling goes, you need to work on it a little bit. All these pages consist mainly of closeups and/or "stand-around" poses. Even for those of us who don't speak much Spanish, the basic gist of the storyline should be clear. I really can't figure out what in the world is going on here. Maybe try backing out for some larger establishing shots, and include a bit more background on some long shots of the characters and their environment. Great start, especially considering these appear to have been done entirely by hand. Keep it up!

[Johnny Blaque]

Also, some of the characters can convey more emotion. That one guy whi is yelling something should atleast have his mouth open.

I have to agree with EasyRider, these are good pages. You just need to tweak them and they will be great.

[CHIZ]

Originally posted by EasyRider
Looks pretty cool so far, as far as art style. As far as storytelling goes, you need to work on it a little bit. All these pages consist mainly of closeups and/or "stand-around" poses. Even for those of us who don't speak much Spanish, the basic gist of the storyline should be clear. I really can't figure out what in the world is going on here. Maybe try backing out for some larger establishing shots, and include a bit more background on some long shots of the characters and their environment. Great start, especially considering these appear to have been done entirely by hand. Keep it up!



thanks very much for the advises.this probably,is the most eye opener,reality check critic that i have received.now i can see where i can improve.:)

johnny blaque made a very good pont also.

[JohnnyBoy]

Por ahora viene muy bien, aunque me costo darme cuenta de quien estaba hablando al principio. El uso de los colores me parece buenisimo, aunque me parece que esos dibujos se podrian beneficiar de una tecnica un poco mas liquida o incluso photoshop. Mas alla de eso, bien hecho!

[M@u::]

bravo! me gusta mucho tuo stile
hola

[CHIZ]

gracias por las palabras! voy a ir mostrando mas pronto