View Full Version : Sparx II #2 begins....
09-25-2002, 09:02 PM
AN UPDATE!!!! heh....
Sparx II #2 (http://www.livewiredstudios.com/thesite/sparx/sparx2/sparx2cov2.htm)
now com'n folks....gimme something to work with...do ya like it? hate it? why or why not....
I know there are a gazillion online comics out there...and I'm one of those consistent ones...but please...tell me ya love me or hate me!!!
10-02-2002, 09:17 PM
3 pages have been added to keep you interested in the story...
com'n folks tell me something!
updated pages... (http://www.livewiredstudios.com/thesite/sparx/sparx2/sparx2037.htm)
10-09-2002, 01:54 PM
5 pages have been added to give more personality to what's going on in this story of Sparx II.
Go for it. Read it.
10-09-2002, 02:39 PM
I read it, and as an average reader, and critic, I would hace to say first of all, dont ever use that blur effect again. I like your inks and lighting, but your page layout could use some exitement. try alot more difficult points of view and perspective.
Your writing, has a good plot, but for the next one, make it stand out a littlemore. (im not a writer, i dont know what im talking about).
And in your character development, even little characters like the cops, you need to elaborate your drawing. At first i wasn't sure if they were cops or mormons.
You've obviously have the skill, motive and resources to to make your own comic, so now just keep building from there! Keep imagining it as stills from a movie in your head. 3 stars out of five so far....
10-10-2002, 08:34 AM
Well hello there Djb5k
I'm thankful for you sparing your time to sit yourself down to read my story and to also put in comments for it. Very rare to get one these days...
First off, the blurrings: I apologize, I didn't even realize that I was using it too much...thus the reason I need comments and crits. I also tell myself that I'm testing the waters with my drawings and using the computer detailings. This is all an experiment to decide what looks better, what makes it cool-looking and how I should tell it, panel by panel.
As for your comment about making my next story stand out a little more? I guessing that the whole realism/Annie eyes isn't working? Actually, I'm not going to explain myself here mainly due to the fact that it's more about the main character's past. I wanted conflicts of his past to interfere into the present.
Hmmm...as for elaborating my drawings...I am still working on that. thanks for the comment about the cop/mormon...made me smile....why? cuz I was thinking the exact same thing when I went over it the other day....I didn't realize it. ah well...
And the last comment you wrote about keep imagining it as from a movie in my head...heh....I do it all the time...
and hey...again...thanks for taking the time for critiquing my work!!
Have you checked out any of my other stories? I recommend Horntoad Sam!
10-23-2002, 02:48 PM
just dropping a note to tell you all that Sparx has been updating every week even though I have a hard time coming back here...there's plenty of pages to look through....the story opens slowly but surely...and you'll find it entertaining!!!
comments and crits are welcome!!!
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