Tinn - WIP

[Neon Neuron]

I decided to revisit this one. Did some minor changes. Is the BG alright or is it to much? Would like to know what everyone thinks so far.
http://i1195.photobucket.com/albums/aa383/neonneuron/tena2.jpg

[covie]

This has a very nice stylized feel to it. I think you've done really well here. There are a couple anatomical/proportional issues that you might want to address. For example, her head is rather large in comparison to her torso. Her head is actually bigger than her waist. Also, I think that some form of emotion on her face would go a long way in selling the piece. I mean she just hefted that ENORMOUS axe and cut through that old tree, exhaustion or rage might be appropriate. Those two things, among others, will go a rather long in making this better.

[Einar]

Hey, I like this piece, there is a good deal of energy captured in it and also like the style and the idea. It needs some cleaning up thou to hit really hard, so follow what covie said, it's real good advice.
My addition would be to rethink the angle of the axe head, it looks a bit disturbing depth-wise at the moment. I don't think we should see the hatched face towards the girl, or, alternatively the handle-head contact should be handled differently.
I also think you could go wilder on exaggerating body parts and muscles.
I would be happy to see any updates if you decide to take them.

[Neon Neuron]

Covie- Yeah...now that you bring it up, she does look a little vacant. I redo her head and adjust the shape as well as give a more pronounced emotion.

Einar- I can't believe I messed up the handle that bad. It helps to see from a second (and 3rd) set of eyes. I'll try and push the style a lot further.

[Neon Neuron]

Alright, I've worked a bit on expressions and this is what i've come up with so far.
The final product I'm going to change the inking style to match the faces. Cleaner line work.
Anyway, on with the show!
http://i1195.photobucket.com/albums/aa383/neonneuron/Faces.jpg

[Neon Neuron]

Haven''t had much time for creative endeavors lately, so I make time where I can.
While inking Tinas face, I realized I was working to much before actually making proper changes and adjustments.
Here is the progress thus far.
http://i1195.photobucket.com/albums/aa383/neonneuron/tenaWip01.jpg

[Duhburger]

Looks really cool. I think you could work on the foreshortening of her leg and make adjustments on her pelvic area to really define it.

[Bruce Lee]

I think you could vastly improve this piece with a few tweaks, Neon. There's a little visual confusion that would be rather easy to clear up. Want an overlay?

[Neon Neuron]

Yeah, I'd really appreciate an overlay.

[shannonh]

I like the changes on the face.

[Bruce Lee]

All righty then. Hope this helps. :)


http://www.lostonwallace.com/tenawip.jpg

[dxdragon]

your proportions are getting better. On the first version, her hands would fall around the knees and her straight leg looked all wonky.

Your second rough showed much improvement...I would like to see the final or a more fleshed out draft.

[Neon Neuron]

Loston- Thanks! This really helps. The position, the twist of the abdomen, and the skirt. Gives me more to think about when I'm laying out a drawing. I can see now how 2 dimensional my original piece was. I like all the little extra advice, too.

DxDragon - Thanks. I only have little pockets of time to work on this right now. I like where shes headed, and after seeing Lostons Overlay, it can only get better.

Deep Thoughts by Mike:
I think too often we tend to jump right into a piece with an original idea, and are so set in the vision in our mind that we fail to enjoy the exploration that in inherent inthe whole artistic process.

[Bruce Lee]

Loston- Thanks! This really helps. The position, the twist of the abdomen, and the skirt. Gives me more to think about when I'm laying out a drawing. I can see now how 2 dimensional my original piece was. I like all the little extra advice, too.


Glad I could help. Keep at it.