Steampunk Lord

[Einar]

Last week's WSG topic: original character Lord Cotter Collins of Oreville by Favorite-N.
Character description here (http://www.penciljack.com/forum/showthread.php?115667-Weekly-Sketch-Group-263&p=1296729&viewfull=1#post1296729)

Let me know what you think. Cheers.
http://i976.photobucket.com/albums/ae248/einar036/Penciljack/20120617_wsg263_steamjudge_gsc.jpg

[Kanji]

I like the intricacy you presented with this sketch. The angle of his feet looks off, though. I think the left(his right) could be tilted back into space a lil bit more.

[Einar]

Thanks very much for the comment, Kanji. I used to think that the other leg (right in the picture) is out of place, but now I see that the one you mentioned could use a bit of repositioning. Well, the legs in general...

[hadesillustrations]

OK, I keep looking at this pic and there's something just off about it, beyond the foot angle issue. It's a good attempt and shows some good detail but there are several areas you could improve on. First, it seems more gothic-punk than steampunk. Steampunk can be clunky, but it's often more clockwork than big metal chunks. The shoulder pads remind me more of WH40K than something built in the victorian age. His clothing also doesn't say steampunk to me. It's kind of blah - especially blah for a "lord". Finally, the body position is not imposing. A more straight on shot without the slight downward camera angle (if anything, make it a slight upward camera angle - this makes the subject look more imposing) would add grandeur to the character.

Like I said, it's a good attempt. I like that you added doodads and knick knacks all over, but it still doesn't say steampunk to me. I think you'll get it though - your heads in the right place for it.

[pell]

It looks cool, and it fulfills the written design description (which included Warhammer). I think what makes the figure look off is that it seems like completely different perspective lines and proportions are used below the waist than above.

[Einar]

Alex, Pell, thanks very much for the comments.

You know I love marines, Alex, so even thou the description directly quoted a 40k SM, I still got a bit overboard:-). I agree with your steam punk image thou, should be slender, more intricate, etc.. I also admit that I got bored of adding more and more details, so yeah, he could have used more decoration to become a proper lord.

Pell, thanks very much for the points on different perspectives and body proportions. It was just half clear, I felt that there was something off as all you guys said, but I have a better grasp on what that is now. It seems I need to learn a lot about spatial depth and positioning.