The Boy Wonder

[Frito]

Recently finished reading the first trade of Grant Morrison's Batman and Robin.

http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5255/5425498067_f06ac137d7_b.jpg

[Bryan E.Warner]

Looks rather sinister ;)

[DustDevils]

Pretty cool street urchiny-looking Robin. Some of the shadowing could use further attention.. I mainly see some conflict on his left arm, right under his shoulder. The shadow comes off as a bit confusing, it looks like he'd have a big gaping dent in his arm between the deltoid and bicep. His head also looks a bit too big for his body.

Keep up the awesome work! Want to see more! :D

[Frito]

Thanks guys!
Yep I can see what you're saying about the shadow, it does look a bit off now you mention it. In terms of the larger head, that was actually a conscious decision. I was attempting more child-like proportions, to make robin look his age. Maybe I didn't pull it off so well - Its something I'm trying to practice. Anyway, thanks for the feedback!

[getbentcomics]

overall, i like it. the only gripe i have is the face. not being an artist, i have no idea what im talking about, but it just looks like there's too many lines being used

[Bach2099]

Great stuff man. I do agree with getbentcomics though, a few less lines on the face will make Damian look a lot younger. Love the flying kick pose!

[tooderisive]

Excellent work so far. Choice of lighting was bad-ass. Definitely keep at it!

I'll approach the basics of shape and perspective since the others are focusing on the detailing.

http://i268.photobucket.com/albums/jj19/tooderisive/Overdraws/critique-1.jpg

[penciljack]

I really dig the stark contrast of the inked lines and the spotted blacks; I think the ink style is the high point of this piece. I don't enjoy the hatching so much, though - I'd encourage you to leave it out and see how the piece felt to you (especially if you intended to add tones or colors later).

The one thing that I think really needs to be addressed is his face, though - he looks rather too old than a boy wonder should (I might even say elderly), due in no small part to the amount of lines on his face. Not just talking about the hatching lines, either, but the creases and wrinkles on his face. Younger folks don't tend to have so many as older folks, and in the case of younger comic characters, a few lines really go a long way.

Still, I think you have something really cool with the very contrasty inking style you have on the clothing, and would like to see you apply it all across the piece instead of resorting to the hatching, which doesn't make sense in some places. As an example, it would seem to me if the underside of his right leg is in complete shadow, then at least part of his face would be in shadow because it was obscured by the hood (and the overall lighting seems to be coming from behind him, a little to his right.)

Think about his pose a bit, too - I feel as if his torso should be twisted one way or another in order to pull of this kick, but there are many ways you could go with it and I'm not sure where you intended his kick to land.

Keep working with that ink style, it's rawrsome!

[Frito]

Thanks a lot guys!

I'm actually slightly embarrassed about the direction the capes flowing - its so completely obvious and I don't know why I didn't think of it. Ah well, thanks for bringing it up, definitely won't be forgetting that again ha. The draw over was a big help so thanks tooderisive!

Yeah I definitely got carried away with the lines of the face. In terms of hatching, that was completely an experiment, something I've dabbled in before but never really applied to anything proper. Clearly need to look it over again. Inking is something I'm not really very experienced with, especially when it comes to spotting blacks, so I appreciate the indepth feedback penciljack. Hopefully we'll be able to see some improvement soon!